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Rub-a-dub-dub

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A gaping black maw
devours all in its path-
chew with your mouth closed

Author notes

a haiku

AP name: FallingSideways


There is the story of baby Krishna, wrongly accused by his friends of eating a bit of dirt. His foster mother, Yashoda, comes up to him with a wagging finger. "You shouldn't eat dirt, you naughty boy," she scolds him. "But I haven't," says the unchallenged lord of all and everything, in sport disguised as a frightened human child. "Tut! Tut! Open your mouth," orders Yashoda. Krishna does as he is told. He opens his mouth. Yashoda gasps. She sees in Krishna's mouth the whole complete entire timeless universe, all the stars and planets of space and the distance between them, all the lands and seas of the earth and the life in them; she sees all the days of yesterday and all the days of tomorrow; she sees all ideas and all emotions, all pity and all hope, and the three strands of matter; not a pebble, candle, creature, village or galaxy is missing, including herself and every bit of dirt in its truthful place. (Quoted from Yann Martell's Life of Pi)

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  • whiterabbit.
    October 25, 2008

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    This is cute and fun. I haven't read a haiku for this contest yet. I also enjoyed the author's notes. Thanks for entering.

  • mythicdreamer
    October 7, 2008

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    Ha -- a fun one. Love it, and can't help but think of a place mat for kids at the table. (I guess that's my teaching background seeping out)

    I was fascinated by the story of baby Krishna. Now I must look up Yann Martell.

    I enjoyed both~


    • FallingSideways silver member
      October 7, 2008
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      I rather enjoy levity and fun writes as this to take a break from overly serious spews
      I am glad you appreciated both the haiku and the excerpt.


  • Yemassee gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    This is such a cute haiku and it fits the photo, or rather the photo fits the haiku. That little critter sort of reminds me of myself...I do like to eat.

    Thanks for the story in the author notes too, I found that quite interesting.

    Gaping Black Yem


    • FallingSideways silver member
      October 7, 2008
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      ...as do I and probably hence my inspiration.
      Glad you seemingly enjoyed both.


  • Reset Button
    October 7, 2008

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    This reminds me of what you told me to do to get my stubborn husband to take his meds. This made me smile.

    Yink


    • FallingSideways silver member
      October 7, 2008
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      I am glad you saw its intended humor
      although I don't think the critter's nipple is being tweaked

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