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Farther falling faster,
how much further till i lose it,
sanity's fading
closer to the world,
i'm hating.
this sliding ride,
with every fall
farther down
how much further till i
lose it all
Grace ain't fading,
just there waiting,
for me to come home
and stop
the curliecue ride.
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Written February 15th, 2003
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it's odd, because there's punctuation, but when i read it i found myself running it together and feeling breathless and indeed like i was falling. great writing. -
excellent
Very good made me think of a song that fades out at the end with people still talking or singing in that case but with out the music thats how i read it. very good work gives the imagination of someone or something falling. -
wow
i love the feelign of falling down the page...i sorta imagined a rollercoaster dropping down totally free from things holding you back...and as i read i was hoping that at the bottom id hear the metaphorical sound of the chains lifting me up again..and i did...this is beautiful and really inspiring.. God bless you more, take care Simeon -
This was awesome!! Wow!! Ash, you're really good at this poetry thing. I swear I say that every single comment I make on yours, but it's true..This was really good, and I liked the idea of grace waiting for you. It's very true!! Great write, and God bless! -Saab
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Hey sis, thanks for sharing that with me and everyone else. It's great to read your new poems. I really liked this one. It's so true how we can hate the way we're going, but grace is always there for us and it never fades. It just waits for us to be ready to accept it.
Matt -
awesome
wowzers this is kinda sad and an exellent poem. anyway good job and keep writing.
-tiberriver256
ps thanks for writing a new one
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Well written. Has that dropping affect...Like starts off with a person reading it loud and just eventually droning out. I thought it was good, because it meant something for one and secondly it had a certain tune about it that made me feel it a lot more. Good job and great write.
~Bethany~
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