"I sweat out the demons,
but they climb back in
thru my bloodshot eyes"
Excreting the blood of windigo
jabbed in the orbital gateway.
Violated by the jaguar god
who was banished
to a diamond dust desert
awaiting to be bestowed a razor wire crown
with a shroud of shame
stained by Totem tears.
Weepings form a vitiated oasis for the damned.
those that drink
are cursed
…and bound
to regurgitate their sins
in liquid form
only to lap it up again.
Author notes
lunarlunacy
A contest entry
- Quickie Picture Prompt by whispernthedark.
700 points, ended October 7, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into Gold (or silver or bronze) pt 8 by whispernthedark.
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Comments
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I really enjoy this type of thing, dude. It's like a visual snapshot of various Dali paintings.
Really dig the ending. Super great wording and really surreal description through out had my inner eye tripping over a photon by the closer. I landed on a quark and stared back up through the electron microscope, but was launched back into the drink. I was promptly consumed.
Sweet write, impressive vocab.
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I really enjoy this type of thing, dude. It's like a visual snapshot of various Dali paintings.
Really dig the ending. Super great wording and really surreal description through out had my inner eye tripping over a photon by the closer. I landed on a quark and stared back up through the electron microscope, but was launched back into the drink. I was promptly consumed.
Sweet write, impressive vocab. -
Liquid
Thank you for entering the contest. I did enjoy the last stanza. It almost had a biblical feel to it, the dambed lost forever. Good luck in the contest.
RF
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umm weird? interesting for sure. so many metaphors and so little time, it seems. thank you.
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Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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i think the first stanza was your strongest image.
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My favorite so far!
This one is more tight, a little more disciplined. Second stanza is your strongest image, well written.
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You have given quite a story to the picture prompt. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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