Unabashed and ruthless victory,
You truly show no mercy.
I should have known it all along,
But I couldn't stop from hoping.
Never fear, you've set me straight,
Your cruel words did their job.
And now my tears, they can't stop flowing.
Is this what you've wanted all along?
Be content with my tears,
Claim them as sweet victory,
For you've won your little game.
By pushing back all my barriers.
You fooled me, acting kindly.
Was it your intention all along,
To break me down to nothing?
Well, you've succeeded in your mission,
Now there's nothing left to say.
So leave me be forever,
To mend this broken heart,
Which has always loved you dearly.
Author notes
Option 2:
Write me about someone breaking your heart. This is my favourite option for sure. I'd love a good cry right now. Give me loads of emotion. I want the whole story.
**Heartbroken-Headcase**
A contest entry
- Mildly Melancholy Options Contest by Cavca.
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Comments
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A very good entry, very heart felt.
It seems to show the person who is on the recieving side of such hatred
Good luck with the contest -
Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josie
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This was a great poem with a lot of emotion. I really loved this peice and thought it was absolutly beautiful. but could you please put your ap name in your author notes.
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I would, but I take it it's too late now?
But thank you! I had a bunch of fun when I wrote this poem ^^
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Great work! I feel your pain...tinged with a little anger, too. The only thing I would change is the last line-- "Which has always to loved you dearly." I think it would be better "Which has always loved you too dearly". Aside from that, great work, and excellent luck in the contest! -Shannon
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Huh. Well, the idea certainly fits. I'm sorry there is so much anger in this. The only parts that catch me up are the two stanzas you break the pattern. Those are difficult to read. But I like how you said it, your imagery is good. Good luck. Thanks for entering.
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Ah.....very sad.
Some times we hurt individuals we care about more than anything, because we care about them so much and we are so afraid we will never be accepted.
Kinda hard to explain.
But you sometimes don't realise how much an individual loves you unless if you see how hurt you are capable of making them.
Sounds evil...sadistic maybe.....but alas, those that truly love us, will forgive us in their true hearts.
I don't know you,
But I identify with your struggle.
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