a leaf on the wind
golden shard born aloft
-vagabond treasure
Author notes
for Jane
In a list
A contest entry
- October by Danna Hobart.
390 points, ended October 9, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I can see in my minds eye "a leaf on the wind, golden shard born aloft", even though we are in late spring and most things are green. A really good haiku.
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Hi dog, n how are you these days? I've been AWOL from writing poetry for a couple months now as my hubby had another amputation on his non-amputated leg (2 toes) then a month later a pacemaker put in (due to heart stopping) both done on both our birthdays respectively, so for christmas... what? A labotamy?? LMAO. Anyways wanted to get back in the swing of things and thought i'd give one of your wonderful haiku's a look-see. This one is breathtaking, unique, smart, & your choice of words i find highly intelligent. Major prop's to you on this haiku. Warmly, chrissy
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nice pottery.
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thanx ea!
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Seventeen syllables that are thought provoking, full of imagery and satisfy with a sigh, the inclusion of vagabonds leaves this resonating.
Congratulations on the well deserved HM.
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I like this a lot. I read it again and again and thought how imaginative that it is. Now i know what all those things are i read on the train going to work every morning. A very clever play on words. I normally find them difficulty to understand (this type of poetry) but you gave that one a sense of, 'hey, see me' and i did. Well done, Dogfish.
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Just scrumptious!!
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One of the better haikus I've read in awhile, love the word vagabond, very effective.
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i used to make crowns of the leaves and would only use leaves that were in the act of falling- if they hit the ground they were "soiled" lol... i always would try for the brightest ones like jewels about my forehead and then i would run around like a crazy lady like in alice and wonderland...
and you brought me to this childhood memory with such beautiful simplicity
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Thanks for you interesting recollections...you really do sound like alice and wonderland!
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they are...
they are wings, and leaves
and birds and all sorts of flying objects- and we watch
and love
because they are wings and birds
and all sorts of flying, scattered, independent objects
wonderful poetry
m
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Thank's, Mary. Your empathy doesn't surprise me!
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What a beautiful gift wrapped up in such a consise little package. Thank you for entering.
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Thanks,Danna.
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a beautiful glimpse of autumn
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I am an Autumn baby & love the leaves...
I also usually claim to be a Gypsy ~ it's much easier than trying to explain the different pieces & parts. lol
Lovely haiku, Poet. Lucky Jane. Good luck in Danna's contest.
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Thanks for your thoughts! Autumn is so sad and yet it lifts our hearts so high!
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I don't look at it as being sad as much as being a time of reflection & harvest. Besides, I love the smell of a fire on the hearth & soup on the stove. And hot chocolate, of course. 
You're always welcome, Scribe.
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Perhaps I'm just a melancholy soul...
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Takes one to know one.
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