Clothe yourself in ethereal white.
These wheezing breaths
might
be
your
last.
You'll stain the walls with crimson,
like the life beneath my skin.
Author notes
10.06.08
Vaughn.
Prompt (title):
Blood and Water.
The story behind the poem:
Think hospital with a terminally ill patient, coughing and spraying blood across white sheets. She's your cousin and the disease is genetic. Where will you be in six months?
A contest entry
- PIF: lucky dip [titles] :D by etoile.
550 points, ended October 27, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come One, Come All - The Circus Is In Town by lowercase prelude.
4000 points, ended October 15, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow I like where you went with this, and reading your authors notes made it all the more intense.
great imagery and great take on the title I gave you.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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Very nice!!!! I like this one a lot, you conveyed so much information in so few words! I don't normally do this, and am not going to make a habit of it, but I am running a contest rite now and would love to hear your take on it. If you have the time and would like to, please do, I am loving your style of writing.
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your title is:
blood and water
goodluck.
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