She said she loved me
And I loved her
What more could I possibly want
She cried on my shoulder
I always adored her
Even when she ran back to the one forging tears to her cheeks
Was I a fool
A simple tool
To think I was anything more than a handkerchief to wipe her tears away
She was my one
I was happy and fun
How could I have been so wrong
I thought and I pondered
Spurring a drunken wander
Why could I not be her one
I was a fool
The simplest tool
To think I could be so happy, so young
Now I'm a coward
My heart being lowered
To depths of depression uncharted
Be I alone or in the presence
Of one with enchanting essence
I see no possible way to see us together to my dismay
She was the evidence to prove that
There's some deep flaw keeping me at bay
From any sort of meaningful connection
She was not the one
Just a symbol of
A futile battle in love to be left to the doves
I must rise above
But for now, I'm a coward.
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M I K E
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this is really good.. ]I like it a lot
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this was great and i loved the rhyme scheme you used fit well as well as your ending it really hits hard to the reader great work
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WOWOWOWOW!
First, please re-read my contest rules. Fix your AN within 24 hours, or an Auto DQ.
This really hit it for me...I know I need to suck it up..move on...but I'm a coward in that sense. Thank you for taking the time to enter. A fine write indeed.
ing alone,
Mylee -
nice to rad this i made my boyfriend feel like this all he did when we broke up was get drunk and stoned. very sad. but i figured out he was the one for me. and now we are getting married and im pregnant. life can change.
lissa
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and I know how that feels. My ex bf..now fiance
and i are in the same boat -rubs belly- 32 weeks, twin boys
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reminds me of how people use eachother
good poem
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wow this isn't to far from hitting home...
love how you put it all
i can understand this feeling
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Oh that is so very sad, I remember this heart wrenching feeling. Not a fun one to endure. You did a magnificent job describing these despairing thoughts! Great write
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