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Who's to say why I play, with a poppy everyday?
Let's not worry for my follies
Nor for you'se, and your blow up dollies
I hafta sleep to be a creep
In your daughter's window, I peep then leap
I build a box, and then unpick locks
That thieves left behind amid those red rocks
I thought that I was there to remind you?
Today I found out that you were dead
Four days unfound between your couch and bed
Your flowered vases were also dead & slumped over.
It was the morphine cherries of August
It was the morphine cherries the sun
Morphine cherries of August
I watched you come undone.
Your dead rat Ed's ghost was laughing and floating
Around outside your old front door
I hope you never felt like a whore
You were a helluva chaotic person like me
But with a cunt and tits you see
You topped off your speed sundae with a morphine cherry
You were the first girl that let me put it in her ass
You knew we’d both get off so fast
You could out drink me, out fuck me,
but you couldn't cook for shit.
It was the morphine cherries of August
It was the morphine cherries the sun
Morphine cherries of August
I watched you come undone.
I told you that your dream of being
a beautiful flight attendant was weak,
and thought-out poorly,
but who was I to lessen your aspirations,
and nullify your desires?
Now it's to late to apologize,
why couldn't I just agree with a smile?
And kiss you for wanting anything other
than what you already were.
I am a beast-man with tangled wolf fur
Your death is the downfall of my logic
Everything I've claimed superior is now inferior,
as you've been placed in the Earth's interior.
It was the morphine cherries of August
It was the morphine cherries the sun
Morphine cherries of August
I watched you come undone.
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Author notes
For Denise, sorry.
64.34.180.106/songs.aspx?SongID=1619&ArtistID=9993
www.gangbox.com
Written January 25th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Anal by ea.
300 points, ended May 12, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Who's to say that thieves cannot remind one of things you left undone? Who's to say that the whole palaver isn't a dream? It's never too late to apologize. Never. The downfall of logic is a slippery concept. You need to listen carefully to realise that.
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For shame that I can not hear it because it really was awesome! I so loved it!
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Song a bit different that the poem, but gave me the music and it was great for this piece. Liked the voices too.
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I'm sorry I didn't get to, I've got the slowest dial up and it tends to freeze when i try to open media files...it blows. Good poem, even if i didn't get to hear it.
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but did you hear it?
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but did you listen to it?
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That was pretty freaking awesome. Seriously. That was quite refreshing, I haven't read anything good in quite a while and this is definatly going in my favs. The repetition was well used in this poem and everything flowed like water. Great job!
Belle
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this was a damn good poem! loved it!
"It was the morphine cherries of August
It was the morphine cherries the sun
Morphine cherries of August
I watched you come undone."
i really like the repetition of that stanza it really put the poem together quite well.
"Your dead rat Ed's ghost was laughing and floating
Around outside your old front door
I hope you never felt like a whore
You were a helluva chaotic person like me
But with a cunt and tits you see
You topped off your speed sundae with a morphine cherry
You were the first girl that let me put it in her ass
You knew we’d both get off so fast
You could out drink me, out fuck me,
but you couldn't cook for shit."
this was an intresting stanza. i liked the last line...you know how to write a poem!
this was a great piece!
thanks for sharing this
♥ Lynn
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Interesting piece.... :-) It's obviously written with the contest subject in mind, and it obviously addresses that well. It seemed like a swirl of energy and sweeping sensation to me, but then, that works with the morphine idea. The language and expression was too coarse for my tast, but that is simply only my personal taste...but again, it also works with the morphine LOL Interesting piece...well done :-)
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interesting
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It sounded good!
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I met a girl I studied Englsih literature at uni with lately. It was nice, we talked about Shelley and Keats before I took her home to sodomise her. She was a darling.
I love this, there are bit's of black humour (can't cook for shit) mixed in with passages of sheer beauty.
"why couldn't I just agree with a smile?
And kiss you for wanting anything other
than what you already were"
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ok..whoa..that's about all I can say. I wish I could hear this audio but I can't so I'll just have to image that it's as powerful as the piece. Bravo.
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The audio was GREAT on this. I think I will insist on poets submitting audio with all work from now on. Astonishing tribute to the first girl who let you put it in her ass. Didn't we meet in the Cash Cab? Bravo.
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excellent
horus8, you have a highly original way with words that I find very stimulating. Good luck in the contest, as this was an excellent poem.
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oh, and for those interested, Toni Bentley, a ballet dancer, has written a book called 'Surrender' documenting her foray into and obsession with anal sex...
~tryst
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this poem is its own verdict
i listened to this just now, read and re-read the poem...and can't think of a single word to say....my heart is pounding.
sometimes dead silence is the highest compliment...
...hope you have found peace.
~tryst
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excellent~
I have to agree hon your writing is top notch haven't stopped by to read anything of your lately but the title caught my eye as the Dr now have me on Morphine by alas no cherries to go with it excellent but sad poem and will definitley go by and listen to the music this was excellent...
Top notch...but then all your poems are great
Do hope all has been okay with you
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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Vivid
You writing is of the top notch on AP. And this little stunner gives me no reason to doubt that for a second. Brilliant! -
I wrote the lyric that way, because people have expected it to be that way...
But, on looking back, It was reversed -- I wasn't interested then, nor am I now,
but she wanted too. because she had some hang-ups with her vagina. -
Yep.
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awesome
what is it about anal sex that guys like so much? great poem anyway, not comfortable... but who needs that -
Deal.
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I dunno about all the Shakespeare talk, but it's a damn good song. The words are poignant and hit hard, crude as a blue poet in the Village, but just perceptive enough to be depressing. The driving strength of the song is the repetative guitar lick that forces the head to groove, even if one is cringing from the "first girl that let me put it in her ass" line. This is really good music, and I'll bet it's great live. If you're ever in Germany let me know and I'll show you the soulful underbelly of some of my favorite towns.
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great!! Very nice!! :-)
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I had a listen and followed the lyrics at the same time, towards the end there's parts missing and mixed around. not bad i really liked the song and the lyrics in it more than the ones that appear here in print.
good stuff and keep in touch -
Lol as many others said like shakespear meets modern time lol good job and also good site and well lol i liked the poem/song etc what ever you want to call it lol well good job
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well, you can always try going to www.gangbox.com
and clicking on music videos and music. -
I definitely tried ... for some reason the music isn't playing once the flash player launches ... I'll probably mess around later and see what the deal is ...
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Did you listen to it?
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Shakespeare meets the modern world with a twist. Very lyrical and definitely struck a deep chord. Hard line stuff but in a weird way I felt a strong connection with your words. I really enjoyed the raw, real experience.
The depth of your craft is displayed by the many layers presented in this piece!
Fantastic work -
Peace ~ Brian -
Wow. This was very moving. Thanks for sharing. Write on. ~~SpydurPoet~~
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you know how much I like this one
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Wow this was very interesting the reation to morphinr really stuck with me; I took as addiction,but to whom or what.Thats just how I took,I did listen to it on one of the links anf was very catchy.Keep up the good work.
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I liked the title and the internal rhyme in the first lines of the stanzas worked nicely, but then I stumbled on lines like:
"That thieves left behind amid those red rocks
I thought that I was there to remind you?"
and
"Four days unfound between your couch and bed
Your flowered vases were also dead & slumped"
Just seem to lose the natural flow and suddenly the rhyme felt forced. Perhaps you can cover this with music, but as poetry I think you should consider reworking these lines.
You re-establish the poem with the chorus, but lose it again mid stanza. Again, it may work with something in the music, but as poetry, the flow is lost here.
Just some thoughts...
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btw who's this Poppy person that you play with everyday- she's very lucky...
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great what can i say that you havent already said to yourself eeh by gum whats it like to be so talented i sometimes wonder why the hell you arent famous yet? its a total mystery to me you havent even been in the newspapers yet. you really will have to start streaking or going out with someone famous or get a part in a movie or something. maybe you could read the weather. why arent you famous you must be doing something wrong somewhere.
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possibly, cause you sing basically the same stuff just in a different order btw, where can I find emotionally unavailable's lyrics (the song, not cd) it doesn't seem to be in the gangbox list and neither in the emotionally unavailable.
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Who knows, perhaps I was improvising?
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hmm, this is definitely my favourite song by you. Only thing is: the song I have's lyrics is different. Why is this? awesome song though!
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Well that was enough for me to want the album! Love this piece! This is a superb write! So here is the other 5 points for the contest! Hope to hear this piece set to music! but then again there is some tough competition in this contest!
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Morphine!? Yeah... interesting poem is about all I can say... and interesting concept. You could use a little more flow but it was still pretty good.
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shit...
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Excellent
I can see a number of possible stories in here, one much like one of my own, except it was a kid I faied to help.
We do find friends that have a distructive addiction that we as friends try and help them from. This sounds like one that they had to be willing to help themselves from before you could have done anything. -
The flow was good...the story was a sad tale indeed...but the rhymes fit together nicely...
Jessixa -
Who knows?
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Cherries and morphine what happened to chocolate?
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Very cool song, but also chilling and reminds me somewhat of Sylvia's work, Poppy's...but more raw lol.
love the third stanza.
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it's january, care to slip me a couple of those morphine cherries? i could do with something that tastes good and squishes me to insensibility...
theres nothing wrong with honesty, but you should try and hide it in sublty...
Nyx...
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yeah, i definitely got wet the first time I listened to this but it was because of your introduction ...the story and telling make me too sad... so i couldn't finish myself off properly. I'll keep trying though.
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Ooooh, that's splendid, friend. Your groupees will get all in a frenzy over this (and cum on themselves, no doubt). I want to hear it with the music (no speakers... crap.) Fantastic rhymes and lyrical cleverness. Also has that beautiful/haunting/facing-mortality-but-not-so-afraid-of-it thing going on.
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Well Done
Damnation Pilgrim. Your chaotic, yet precise word play has left me sitting under the cherry tree, contemplating life and death in the metaphor of a cherry pit, so small, dark and round - the flesh missing, but t'was sweet when formed.
Well done indeed. Thou voice is a fitting eulogy and this tribute provides existence beyond the remembering.
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