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The thoughts await me.

  Sometimes I wonder what if I just let myself go into oblivion. I'm not sure why my mind always dwells on the past; I'm not sure why I can’t move along and learn. Maybe its regret... Such a word chains me to suffer everyday. I always ask what could I have done different to change the outcome. People say god wanted it that way, I think he is full of himself or whatever he might be. What if I grew attached to religion and church. Maybe my thoughts could become diluted and maybe I can numb the pain, it'll be easier than always trying to laugh, it's so hard. Fuck, I wish I have things my way. I will give up all this spoiled shit for the strength and knowledge. All I have is my dreams and thanks that I'm alive.

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  • BleedingDeep
    December 6, 2008

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    Write it differntly. Besides of doing the paragraph format.. try something else. Its just a sujestion, you don't HAVE to do that. It didn't ryme much at all.. but yet, it was very interging and interesting. Brilinat!