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A Son ( HM )

Whispers to the winds,

voices take us to barren unpleasant lands,

where battles rage in anger,

force-fields lay trapped,

mines uncovering fatal blow.

 

Maimed soldiers,

loss limbs lesser a life,

befallen,

to the grave side marked a rose.

 

Believers hail their trophy flag,

draped by the fist of its carriers,

crossed swords hail brutality,

and lone a woman did cry.

 

Stench of death,

it carries over the smoke that choked,

as so does the buildings burn,

extinguished a life or more.

 

Held high the Pride of Men,

Young, no more then a boy,

leads Countries united,

and the evil that prevailed.

 

In a world of greed,

of believes that swallowed hard,

ethics laid its mark,

and society paid its price.

 

Torched hearts reaching out,

fair Soldiers be our protector,

from this dictatorship control.

 

A Mother weeps in cradled arms,

and he stands beside her,

resting the infant as the grave calls

another innocent life.

 

In lands we hardly heard of,

in deserts uninhabitable,

they dig their trenches,

armed they raise their rifles,

and guard upon thy honor,

to defend until the end is near,

and withdrawal lays its peace.

 

Son of mine I love you,

my wish an Angel pin,

Guarding you from harm,

Until that day unites us,

and the love can carry on.

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For the sons we all love and care for

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Excellent write here honey

    This should have been a gold such a deep heartfelt piece for peace and love has to be enough to bring this country back to a safe home for us all


  • Abe 1
    October 8, 2008

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    a m a z i n
    wowza me lady u ave again shown a story in a poem
    felt i was there seein what was in your words and bringin it to life
    gd luck 2 ya
    abe


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    this is an amazing write, so heartfelt and full of emotion, it brought tears to my eyes, i duno what else to say, your talent for writing is amazing. good luck in the contest,


  • Symphony
    October 7, 2008

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    I cannot imagine the immense sorrow that all those related to soldiers go through; both through anxiety and worry, and then especially when a soldier falls and does not get up once again...

    You put us in their lives, their emotions, their loss. Bravo


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Dear friend, you have moved me to near tears in this awesome write! You make us feel like we are there midst the sorrow of loss of sons, husbands and fathers, plus the loss of infants..Such a noble write, full of descriptive imagery...and alive with feeling! Bravo! Write on!


  • chilali
    October 6, 2008

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    A brilliant poem indeed Julie! You're a star!! This really touched me, and I loved reading every bit of it! Good luck to you in the contest!


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 6, 2008

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    You truly did a very wonderful job writing this piece!! Its so heartfelt!! This is incredible!! You did an amazing job portraying this piece!! I can tell that you put a lot of thought and effort into this write!! I love it!!!


  • Soft-Rain
    October 6, 2008

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    This brought tears to my eyes...I cant say much more i am kinda choked up.
    I wish i could hug my son right now or hear his voice.
    Love
    ~Lisa~


  • aboomer silver member
    October 6, 2008

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    Not anything new I can add to that which has already been said.....so I'll just say:
    Excellent!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    Oh my...this is such an intensely sad and powerful piece. Verses 2 and 8 really struck home hard! Such a deeply heartfelt tribute to all sons everywhere. Really has brought tears to my eyes! An outstanding write, that's a winner through and through to me


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    October 6, 2008

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    Excellent imagery within this well-written composition.
    Very thought provoking and I can relate to it completely.
    Well Done & best of Luck in the contest!


  • daviscth silver member
    October 6, 2008

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    You did a wonderful job with this sis. The emotion is there for all to read... Good luck in the contest. Love you.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    Wow; this blew me away sis.
    Absolutely full of depth and emotion.
    I really love this piece,
    filled with powerful imagery & thoughts.

    brilliant write & best of luck!

    xx


  • Katie Lazette
    October 6, 2008
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    Peace comes at a high price. Thank you for sharing your most beautiful and heartfelt poem. Katie


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    ugh, this one left a huge lump in my throat. Such beauty and power in this heartfelt and sad tribute to our heroes, our sons. gaaah. This makes me ponder so much in my life.......There but for the grace of God go I. Hug your sons tightly and pray for peace. Nicely done, Julie. Wish it didn't have to be written at all.


  • maralisa silver member
    October 6, 2008

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    a brilliant poem julie I think your poem is very deep and powerfully raw on the true realitys of wars pain and devistation good luck in the contest my friend take care marina

  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    Most awesome and true write this is

    So true is our embrace and ove for all our young men and women who faces the devil to keep freedom at home pure and untarnished . We must all do our part here to keep peace above all so they may all come home again

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