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I guess sometimes
I wish I was Elvis Presley,
and not so much Edward Grimley,
but some things, they don’t ever change
I guess I wanted, more than you could give me,
but less than you would show me,
At least that’s never changed.
But you know I changed.
Since we’re straight up convicted felons?
They don't even try to let us vote, and
no jury duty for me or you, and...
nothing's very much fun
Very much fun anymore.
And my friend said “Aint you some kind of poet?”
I burped, and drank more Moet
Hey maybe, maybe I should go now?
He said “Write a song about killing Osama Bin Laden?”
“You can choke him out with Charles Bronson?”
Hey maybe you just write that down yourself
Since you’re so bad...
We are straight up convicted felons
And they don’t want to let us vote or
Own a gun or two, and
Nothing is very much fun.
Very much fun anymore.
Since we’ve become straight up convicted felons
They don’t even want to let us vote, and...
And nothing’s the same anymore,
But nothing has changed.
And nothing’s the same anymore,
But nothing has changed.
listen to the song
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64.34.180.106/songs.aspx?SongID4002&ArtistID9993
www.gangbox.com
Written January 25th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Dead Rock Star Contest: Round 1 by midnight2000.
300 points, ended August 15, 2006, 2 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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i listened to the song, and like someone else, was very much reminded of lou reed. hearing the music is infinitely better than just reading dry lyrics. i love the reference to ed grimley. hardly anyone in my circle of friends recalls the show.
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Awesome!
This was awesome. You've done a great job here...it was very clever with the music.
Thanks so much for sharing!
Kari -
Well, from what I can pick up on my crappy old slow computer using my 56K connection, it sounds pretty good! By the way, my Dad was a big fan of Elvis, they played "My Way," at Dad's funeral. Dad, believe it or not, was one of those in attendance at that notoriously bad performance that Elvis gave at Caesar's Palace back in the 70's. I think they offered Dad his money back without him asking, but he refused; but I can't remember the whole story, it seems Elvis had been sick with the flu or something. ¦:¬{
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excellent, wonderfully written, enjoy the music, very entertaining.
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its so flat and sad and its great and i love your music and writing even if i do presently have no eyebrows or hair at the moment.did you mean a young elvis or a fat one.nice photograph of you stridng along to the public toilets. i get like that sometimes.
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Oh wow. Hahaha. I like this. <3
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Powerful and no-nonsense
Unfortunately I could not hear the sound track, but the words are typical Horus. I missed reading you.
Myra -
Hmm, I dont know what to think right now! Sooo many emotions going on in my head after reading this piece. It is very good. I enjoyed reading it. It makes you think and it has an awesome meaning. I love Elvis myself, weird, huh? lol Keep writing and never ever give up on anything ever in life! ♥
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Great write Horus. And the song was "straight up Kool" I read it a few times and must say, I read several different things in it. Very good job. You get my applaud my friend...GETS
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This piece is excellent and I didn't know that. Truly, they don't let felons vote? Well, that is terrible, since they are citizens. I liked the flow and certain internal rhymes in this piece. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing!
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Damn, I can't listen to the song. The computers in this crappy library have no sound on them.
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This was an energetic write, powerpacked with emotion, I think you did an excellent job here.
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Ain't it the truth
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I really love this song! Do I have to say something intelligent?
I love the repitition and the rhythm and the reallness of it, the grit, the dirt, the truth.
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Ummmm...Okay, I LOVE Elvis, but couldn't quite get into this. Funny though.
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Excellent
I have really enjoyed the Song and reading the Poem. Great work :-) -
i like your lyrics but i couldnt hear the song but very good!!!
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very nice write, i liked it and it has an awesome meaning....if u have the time check me out sometime....
~rock on~
~manda~ -
I THINK IT'S MESSED UP HOW A MAN DOES HIS TIME AND THEN IT'S STILL HELD AGAINST HIM IN SOCIETY WHEN HE GETS OUT...HE ALREADY DID HIS TIME...I REALLY UNDERSTOOD THIS AND ENJOYED IT,THANK YOU FOR SHARING...WILL YOU PLEASE CHECK OUT MY POEM " chux spinelli "
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i liked this. I think it's terrible that they don't let felons vote.
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I feel it. I do. You hit the nail on the head with "Nothing is very much fun anymore" it seems these days if someone catches you enjoying life in any way whatsoever, they try to pass a law against it and call the cops to bust it up.
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Checked this one out before.
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A great piece.
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this is good man!! i liked it a lot... !
mushy -
I like this one! I'm at work and couldnt download the music, the song, here but I will when I get home. I want to hear this little ditty. Elvis has always been my idol. I love him! I also love Bronson. so this is fun to read.
funny about felons not able to vote, ain't it. that just seems soooo wrong to me.
good song.
~travis
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good
Sometimes I wish I was dead, otherwise, I tend to wish I was Bob Dylan or Van Morrison. -
Poor Elvis - good thing he is dead, or he'd hate all the elvis look alikes and imposters. Interesting poem - some crazy thoughts in these lines.
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Great
Very good. I enjoy everything you write though, more so every read. You've done well with this, great job. -
awww, the speakers aren't working here, but I liked the lyrics and somehow I have this sense there's some Elvis-pelvis grinding moves that can be danced to this song too! it was really fun to read!
Jo -
try this link
music.download.com/thewerewolves/3600-8627_32-100354839.html?tag=listing_song_artist
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So we do have something in common; because your critique didn't mean squat to me, because it wasn't really a critique. I would put a smiley face here, but adolescent drivel bores me.
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I wrote the music, the lyrics, played guitar, and sang it.
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Great
I too unfortunately can't listen to the music but still I felt the words were well written and quite soulful. All in all a very good write, with or without the music. -
I sit back, kick up my feet moving in my chair. Your title was easy for me, I'm a die hard Elvis fan. I smile and think, yep, you want to be like Elvis and I bet right about now, he'd like to be you!
The only that changes, is the environment. Everything else, stays the same. You on cd baby? Oh, I'll check it out. Have a great one, and hey, thanks!
~Michelle~
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Hey, bouncy tune, great chord changes! So 'nothing is fun anymore' but you had me fooled with the fun you had with this piece! (I spent my time looking for the musical credits to see where you fit in!) If you run this one through the studio again add a trio of soul singers in three-part harmony for the last stanza to really kick it up and a bongo player to go with your whistling and... oops, getting carried away, never mind! lol Three thumbs up!
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that's a picture of me.
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I guess sometimes
I wish I was Elvis Presley,
and not so much Edward Grimley,
but some things, they don’t ever change
I guess I wanted, more than you could give me,
but less than you would show me,
At least that’s never changed.
But you know I changed.
Since we’re straight up convicted felons?
They don't even try to let us vote, and
no jury duty for me or you, and...
nothing's very much fun
Very much fun anymore.
These are the few parts I really like,This was just brilliant!!!!!You did a great job!!!Although You could have got a better pic of him lol!!!But other then that Amazing write!!!Great write keep it up!!!
With love,
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I laughed almost from the begining.Music's not bad at all.The vocal has it's merits too.But the lyrics are just too funny.As were the other comments.Thanks for the tune and giggles.~~~Suseann
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Creative, unique ... wonderful rhythm!!
Excellent lyrics the music in the words become the event that catches... very nicely done I really enjoyed this But I have a question... why would you want to be someone that is dead? J/K Awesome lyrics!! Well done... Brava!! Wishing you much success in all of your artistic endeavors
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Yes.
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not bad, all in all
Well, the song is fine, as far as it goes. I am amazed that you wrote "I wish I was" when it has to be a subjunctive: I wish I were. Other than that, this is fine. Actually, it's an interesting story in itself. Are you a felon? If so, it's a sad story too. -
Wow… that was good… I loved the whistling… was like a cross between Lloyd Cole and Roger Whittaker!
I think maybe you could improve it slightly by putting a real burp in there, in the 4th stanza. 
Have you written the song about killing Osama Bin Laden yet? I wouldn’t mind hearing that.
‘Nothing is changed but nothing’s the same’… hmm, that’s got me thinking… and what’s the gobbledegook at the end there? Is it some kind of subliminal message played in reverse?
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Pure genius man...you are a rider of the new wave of enlightenment cowboys. With fangs to boot.
bad ass tune
Peace Muddy -
The title grabbed me first, then as I read I loved the thought, and you are right, would be a very interesting song, would love to hear it on the radio...excellent job
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why would I wanna be elvis
cant get a grip
I cant seem to find myself
because I now am dead
Yes imma convicted felon
I cannot own a gun
In society I lack my freedom
I guess I wish I was dead
cant go on cant retreat
wont you sing my song
I guess what I am saying
Ill be elvis before long.
Ummmm Hope you like my song......I just made it up.....I loved yours and it inspired me..> Ummmmmm Imma nutkase 
i did love singing yours better though..I sound like a frog on a lilly pad ribbit ribbit.
Malabu
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Very cool song, i like the style alot. Its now gonna be stuck in my head all day because i had to keep reloading it as it loads in steps cos i have rubbish 56k dial up (but yay i get broadband next week lol, totally irrelevant but I'm excited! ) So i had to listen to bits like 10 times before it all loaded properly but i enjoyed it I also think you have a fantastic voice (if thats u singing lol)
Thanks for getting my attention and letting me experience this song,
Great great write,
Much love,
xx Katie xx
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I know here in Brtian they are trying to pass a law that says prisoners can vote, which plays on my 'suspicious mind'sorry couldn't resist that one! nice structure, and enjoyable piece.
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well done
the fact that you have presented this here is heart warming. i know a lot of misicians. they are all jaded and most con't care about the lyrical content of their music. they should. music is a medium of expression that reaches and teaches people whether they like it or not. for too long the 'be cool, be tough' stupid inane music has been dominating our young people's minds. they have never experience music which commentates on social or political issues. if you listen to contemporary music there are a very narrow range of topics, love, lack of love, god and madness. maybe today's world climate is the right time for this to resurface. you are a sign of things to come -
brilliant Amritha
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Hahaha, I don't see the title and the first stanza tying in with the rest, except that if you were Elvis Presley you could get away with anything. I do like it though, it's humorous.
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Interesting.
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Great poem... Everyone wishes they were someone else, and you just came out and said it. Great writing!! And I hope the journey through poetry will be an enchanting one...
P.S. I'm a huge elvis fan!
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if wishes were stars in the darkest skies of our life, you would there shining so brightly with a gun or two ...to fight off the admirers that crawled to kiss your feet...wanna be elvis?
I think you far surpass the burden of proving hwo you are and what you stand for....all of this I say not becaause of your talent...in spite of it you are still a great poet/balladeer...and sure I applaud this piece, simply because I know many convicted straight up felons...cheers...
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Very cool... this has a lyrical quality to it. I think every man at one time in his life wished he was elvis, gee... if i were a man, i'd wish that too...lol
You really took this to a level i didn't expect, i like where i ended up. Very intriguing and original piece of writing.
Nicely done,
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This was a cool poem, but as you know Elvis, is dead. Are you telling us you would rather be dead then alive?
Keep up the good though, this was a nice piece of work. Way to go pal.
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You're better than Elvis but the world aint ready for you so keep living and dying till the King starts crying.
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i heard this but it's nice to read the words
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The third the fifth and the sixth stanzas were the one's I got along with. I just got sucked into those lines and I can't really explain. I'm not a felon I don't think...yet.
Elvis....hmmm...that's a thought.
Peace
Chris -
horusoriously horus8
It is absolutely not fair! I cannot hear you sing this ... I wish you were Elvis, too. Then at least I could have bought your CD out here in South Africa ... and I would have become all flower child again!
Or is it Beatle child? Or Rolling Stone child? Oh my! I am marginal, and it is all your fault ... and you are too. If I read your poem, and I listen with my heart ... Vervreemding, we call it in Afrikaans.
You are doing quite fine by being horus8 ... Keep it up, Poet.
Myra
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this was a great job, I think that if you were the younger elvis you would have more women then you knew what to do with and if you were the older elvis you would not be here with us sharing your talent. Great write, I always did love the jailhouse rock.
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A bit of jailhouse blues here? Interesting concept to this ...won't start delving into my own personal details, but I hear ya.. loud and ..clear to me anyway. This one on your site as a song?
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Could Be In The Top Ten
I'm listening to your CD? as I write this. I must say I'm really enjoying it! I was drawn to it because of the title (good idea). I especially like the end of your recording when you keep repeating "Nothing's the same, nothing has changed, nothing's the same anymore." I'm curious as to what you say at the very end...it sounds like another language (hope it isn't a spell). lol Good music, good lyrics, good beat...good song!
Maureen
One more time!!! (I even looped it!)
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Thank you ve'ry much.
horus8 if you were Elvis Presley you would be dead and people would be spotting you at Wal-Mart all the time. Turn the lights off honey chile, when you leave the building. I wish I was Dixie Carter. -
hey u probably aren't goin to believe me but i will tell u anyway I am actually related to Elvis Presley he is my long distant cousin!
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(its getting harder and harder not to comment on bohb's comments on your stuff I think I'll suggest that he take up a column "Commenting on Horus8') Watch out, the secretary is on duty and watching those jejune weekends...okay my groupie hat goes on to say...i was surprised when i listened to this..horus8 can mix it up...
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Longing Embued
Yah. okay. I wish you were Elvis too because then maybe I could visit Graceland and we could party hearty and shoot guns in the house (I swear to god that is the one unrealized dream I have - to sit in the living room and shoot flies with a .44) -- but if you were, then this wouldn't be a dream and well, hell, without dreams where are we? (Besides Graceland I mean)
Someday, some small sickly child may pipe up and say, "I wish I was Horus8" and you'll be vindicated in a sad sort of way and you'll shed a tear before boarding the jet for another jejune weekend of empty merry making.
Some things never change, but nothings the same as it was -- yep, true words that resonate within my soul. Hey, you're some kind of poet - why don't you write a poem about it? (Yah, I'm evil in a sad sort of way).
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The only way to success is to be yourself and not some body esle. This is not bad, but what does it have to with Elvis??
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