The stars of Libra told me: you and he are incomplete
Each of you is holding a half
Of the one that you could be
So I’m planning to surrender
The half of us I own
But to balance us on the Libra’s stars
You should give up your half, too
And together with the joy of love
We can create a thrilling kingdom
That is ruled only by
Both the halves we own
Author notes
Contest prompt:
The joy of love is nothing except the balance of the legs...Unknown.
Thanks for reading!
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A contest entry
- The joy of love.. by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended October 9, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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50/50, is all we are with hopes to become 1,,, very thoughtfull,,, very deep,,, hummmmm,,, nice one,,,,
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Very nice. The first stanza emotes curiosity that begs for more. Lots to ponder in so few words. Ties in well with the prompt. Well done,
~Mary O
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Wow! Stunning! I liked how you used your story to tell of a tale about love. The structure, the rhythm, it's just beautiful! I'm flabbergasted!
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Stunning
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I Loved this poem. Very well done! I loved every bit of it. I can't even think about any other comment. Good luck to you in all things!
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I like the universality of the thought ..it enhances its range of the impact bringing in it a curious canvas of this life ,especially ,the life of love..a great work you did..well done...
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A joy to read!
Good luck in the contest
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THIS IS FANTASTIC!!!!
Your are so right! Sometimes two have to let go and the best of both of them will find who is right for them separately.
I know this did not come out right, the right words just are not coming right now!
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GREAT take on the prompt!! I loved this poem. Very well written! Well done! This was really beautiful!! Good luck to you in the contest!!
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You're spoiling my critical part of personality lately.
I'm glad you liked it, dear.
Thanks for taking the time to comment.
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