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seville 1963 - feria de abril

 

 

 

 


after bells and hooves are silenced
and pictures developed


once children are tucked, asleep between yellow and orange walls

after her husband returns to cadiz amid flurried news of kennedy and franco

 

maggie will pull a thick velvet album

from the top shelf of a plain wooden hutch,


and begin the process of black-cornering photos of

                             street vendors, monkeys
                             and castanets captured mid-air

and there in the balm of a mediterranean night,  with silver ink
she will speak to her children and to their children


the streets
she will write

were alive



















m

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  • badnovocaine
    October 10, 2008

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    You have such a unique style to you. I like your sense of writing, when I read your poems I sense I can relate or somewhat know how the characters feel.

    I sense a little freedom in this poem?
    Only because of the ending though, because she said the streets are alive. I dont know why but i sensed freedom.... I guess thats just what I thought of whether that really makes sense or not I dont know...

    Anyways good write this is such a creative take on things.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    October 9, 2008

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    you give maggie such a sense of purpose..she's doing so much more than pasting photos in a book..the black cornered photos and silver ink .. my mind goes
    immediately to the those black paged albums, nostalgia and history all wrapped up in one..a legacy

    the line about the castanets really support her words.

    love this series, i so much agree with al.


    • Cat gold member
      October 9, 2008
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      thank you so much-
      so nice to hear-

      m


  • Saltpeter
    October 8, 2008
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    Ah, this reminds me why I favorited you.


  • Balldinger silver member
    October 7, 2008

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    oh, another '63 quiver - a shiver in the spine; a spline in a book; a cook without a liver; a sign of the unsung; a hero hung with a nepotistic fiend; a soldier weened off of killing; and a thrilling sense of living streets. another nail whacked squarely upon its head and driven deeply into wet wood...


  • Rowan gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Oh, I love that last line especially, the streets are like your poetry, hon, so alive. After reading your work it sits inside my head for awhile, spins around
    in a flurry of images. Excellent.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    oh yes!!!!


  • girl shaman
    October 7, 2008

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    are you published and i dont know it?? because you always give off this professional poet vibe to me and it would definatly be a damn shame if you werent and you should be like.. right now!
    anyway.. point is, i've only read this kind of flow from you and you are so ..your own person when it comes to writing and i am in utter admiration of you! im sorry i dont get to comment much please do forgive but when i do get a chance i really enjoy catching your wisdom in every write thank you so much for being you


  • Cannonsfire
    October 6, 2008

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    It's just an illustration with words C


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    i love this...


    (the whole collection when finished should be published)



    al


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    October 6, 2008

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    oooooo i sent you an IM- quick read it! lol
    'her children and their children'
    loved that image


  • Jersene gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    I am rendered speechless...but what elso is new. Your poetry has that affect...it's just sooo good


  • zochit2me gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    I like the image of orange and yellow walls where children are tucked. The non-chalant feel to this, or at least to me it felt that way. Not being close to my family - scattered about after my mothers death at age 7, I like the feel of this and I long for that feel. Memories are important to keep alive and the few pictures in black and white I do have of my mother and father are treasured items to me.

    now for my thoughts on the structure. - yes they do fall from my head occasionally...lol.

    When read aloud, the repeat word of "after" seems to distract from the structure of the poem as a whole...I cannot offer a suggestion as to what, if anything should replace it but it "feels" awkward to me...clunky sorta.

    I do love love love the silver pen image and the speaking to children through pictures...leaving a piece of self behind...yeah that's good.


    this concludes the test of the emergency broadcast system...


    ♥Becky♥

    • Cat gold member
      October 6, 2008
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      if you get a minute would you stop back by?


      • zochit2me gold member
        October 6, 2008
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        I did and you really changed ALOT...lol. I like the changes. you almost rewrote the entire piece...
        I hope I did not offend you for making suggestions of change??? As you say don't hate me...
        I like the changes alot and the poem feels smooth now with even flow and texture. And the non-chalant feel is really gone..which I feel added to the depth. But hey what do I know...you are the master and I am but a student eager to learn

        good changes.


        • Cat gold member
          October 6, 2008
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          i flip-flopped a couple lines and exchanged an after for a once... and added a line because i liked the voice of it..

          loved your suggestions. thank you


  • sailor ptolema
    October 6, 2008
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    so good.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    i'm not sure the 'after' repitition is needed with each of those lines as it seems a little parochial and language is more richer and rounded? but i don't have an answer as to what if anything is needed, i just know when i read this out loud, it seemed to sit full in my mouth..

    anyways... here's the rub, i love love love the story of your family and the life before and after and how memories are passed down through la familia! :beautimous my dear miss moo

    • Cat gold member
      October 6, 2008
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      hey, if you get a minute would you stop back by?...


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    I love it.

    I love the mood, imagery & the creativity with the children tucked between orange and yellow walls.

    very nice...it is so important to keep these stories/history/memories alive...for children, grandchildren..


    my grandmother gave me an album with not only pictures, but little notes beside them in her handwriting of her thoughts at the time, I treasure it...

    very nice=)


  • divebar
    October 6, 2008
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    you said it all. ill just leave the clappies and pick up my jaw.

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