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Adiaphorous Gun

Glass bullets
For a translucent heart
Shatter me
With the insecurities I couldn’t hide
Leave little
For the gun’s imagination

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  • etoile
    October 8, 2008

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    this was a great take on the prompt. very unique ideas, but i really liked it. the imagery was very nice and overall this was a very well-written poem.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Laced with superb darkness! The imagery this presents is chilling, beautifully written bro! Made great reading


  • Deathless1
    October 6, 2008
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    good one, i love how it is filled with emotions and yet says nothing about them.

    good luck