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don't leave me

you had me
on my knees and
gasping
your kisses like hot caramel and
walking away

and I still love
the way you
throw your head back

when you laugh

A contest entry

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  • new born
    January 31
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    I agree with leander. A short poem that says a lot. Fantastic imagery wand wording.

  • leander Moderators member
    November 23, 2008

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    This is quite a short, but delicate poem that you have written here... There is so much more to find behind the lines you've written here - very well done!

    Thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander