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almost clear


fragments fall with distilled patterns
diffusion creates more nature's art
softly clear, air is kinder
allowing passage to seeking more

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prompt: translucent

 

20 words

A contest entry

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  • etoile
    October 8, 2008

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    i loved the first line. it really drew me into the poem and was filled with such unique imagery. this whole short piece had beautiful imagery and i really liked your take on the prompt.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • penman gold member
    October 7, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Terrific creation and use of 20 words. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.