Trust

I shall walk on through the storm,

for in thee I do trust.

I shall pursue my rightful place,

for in thee I am just.

Doubt does not live within my soul,

for I lift up my soul unto thee.

I know the way wherein I shall walk,

for in you; I shall see.

Fear dissolved by thy truth,

thy love cause me to hear;

through thou virtue and grace,

thou are always near.

Author notes

Psalm 142:8

A contest entry

Upright Spirit by Mirthryl. 1050 points, ended October 23, 2008, 11 entries
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Mirthryl
October 21, 2008
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Lovely thoughts on the opposition between fear and faith. It can be intimidating to walk through the storm, or tempting to yeild to doubt, or easy to fear. You point out the small, unremarkable things we can do daily to show our faith...walking, lifting, seeing, hearing, and loving and living truth. And He is truly "always near."
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, and for your entry.
Denerica
October 11, 2008

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It just flows into place and in truth...gives inner strength to what we already should know about trust, thank you for sharing.
AAA Taurus The Bull
October 8, 2008
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Great
I think God would love hearing this, it would be sweet to his ears or should I say is sweet,
This An excruciating and powerful piece of
poetry I love the closing, you captured love very well, your talent shows. There were no errors. Or No typos. Nothing I Would change. I look forward to your next poem
SeptemberFaith
October 6, 2008

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I thought the use of "thou" and "shall" and other similar words didnt add to this poem. I think that it mught be stronger if you replaced those words with words that will tie in more with the rest of the poem.

Other than that I really liked this. It gave me the vision of someone giving their faith and belief to a God and trusting that what He has for them is what is right and that they will follow the path He gives to them knowing He has a plan.

Criss
p.s. I love your background!
MyrddinEmrys
October 6, 2008
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Freedom affirmed
This speaks so beautifully of the freedom found in faith in Truth. The last stanza feels a bit awkward for me, perhaps you might want to combine lines 3 and 4 in some shortened form. Otherwise the rhyme and flow is wonderful. Best wishes in the contest.

Be ever blessed and bright,

Rahad
Aesthete2000
October 6, 2008
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Trust...precious,
but you have expressed
it so very well!