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Ode to Sylvia Plath



You said, my love,
that every woman loves a Nazi
boot in the face.

So for you, my dear,
I will don a feld grau prophylactic
and fuck you up the ass,
twice.


And if you saw in daddy's incestuous penis
the smokestacks of Auschwitz and Dachau,
what would you see in mine?
The steel cannon of your liberation?
The iron sausage of the inquisition?
Or the limp bullet of a fellow neurotic
hiding in the bomb shelter
with paper and pen
whimpering
mommy?




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Sylvia had a hot ass. Was this ugly enough?

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  • porksnorkel
    October 25, 2008
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    I think it would be funnier with "fois gras" prophylactic, considering the orifice of choice.

    • Alpha-Q
      October 26, 2008
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      Feld grau was the color of the Nazi uniform.


  • porksnorkel
    October 25, 2008

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    I don't know shit about Sylvia Plath, but I love this poem here.

    You had me at "the iron sausage of the inquisition", which, obviously, will be stolen as soon as the occasion arises.

    • Alpha-Q
      October 26, 2008
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      Cat didn't like the iron sausage, but I doubt she knows what it is. It was put in the fire and inserted into women to make them confess. They would put it up by her face and show her it was glowing first. Usually got a confession. About as ugly an image as I can think of. Your avatar sure looks like the log from Twin Peaks. Thanks for the kind words.


  • cvillelisa
    October 25, 2008

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    Congrats on your silver!

    This made me wince at first..

    but in the end it leaves this Reader with only a shock value ugliness and not a lot of love. Sorry I couldn't me more positive but hey! I'm just one reader and you've certainly reached others!

    Lisa


  • Cat gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    from the title to the execution- this was excellent-

    the opening as it ties to the title is wonderful- the smokestacks were especially effective- as was the limp bullet
    i am not sure the sausage works as well- but it isn't a deal breaker- i just think the image could be stronger in the midst of a very strong write.

    nicely done- ugly enough

    m


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    ''So for you, my dear,
    I will don a feld grau prophylactic
    and fuck you up the ass,
    twice.''

    this was incredibly origional and i loved it!

    ''And if you saw in daddy's incestuous penis
    the smokestacks of Auschwitz and Dachau,
    what would you see in mine?
    The steel cannon of your liberation?
    The iron sausage of the inquisition?
    Or the limp bullet of a fellow neurotic
    hiding in the bomb shelter
    with paper and pen
    whimpering
    mommy?''

    really fucking clever in its word combinations...
    The whole feel to this with the starting first stanza.... ok bitch.. here ya go....

    Thank you for this entry... it is very strong and yes... this was ugly enough




  • Dalaney gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    this is brilliant! Twisted, yanked, no matter
    which way it is read, the glorious beauty of it
    is astounding. Gold for sure! Oh, can I say
    that??

    Love, Lane

    • Alpha-Q
      October 6, 2008
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      Certainly! If ever there was a contest that begged for something over-the-top, this is it.


      • Dalaney gold member
        October 6, 2008

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        lol...well, you certainly achieved it. ugly love...not all that uncommon unfortunately...well, at least it brought out the best in you Love, Lane

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