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Oh My Beautiful One

I can't choose between my throat and my wrists
Or imagine why I'm thinking about this
Oh My Beautiful One, you were a precious rose
Drifting in a dirty world, sad and alone
I was softened for fear of you wilting away
I fed you what I believed might make you stay
And you slowly wrapped your vines around my heart
And inside of me, you became like another part
You've long withered and gone away,
But your thorns, they still cut into me

The worst of you lives on in me
The unwanted and forgotten piece
As the pain once past is now renewed
I've come to the conclusion: I killed you

To keep you, I believe I sold my soul
You're see through, but I thought you were my home
Or at least as home as I could feel
You were all to me that felt very real
But your thorns puncture my naevity

With an unrelenting longevity

Author notes

about a relationship breaking and one party mostly in the dark as to why and feeling the pain of that for a very long time. And ofourse, believing it's all their fault.

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  • MissyYates
    October 12, 2008

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    Absolutely Beautiful

    I think you have the most beautiful way with words! I adore the way you refer to her as a rose and then the negatives of her and your relationship as the thorns.


  • Faded Existence
    October 9, 2008

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    I absolutely adore this! This is a wonderful peice, down to the very last word! It was absolutely beautiful. Something I can relate to, along with many others I can promise. And you expressed it so perfectly... amazing job!

    -Faded


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    OMG!!

    I simply loved this!
    This reminds me of what i am going through right now.
    And this piece just said it all. What a wonderful piece to read when i'm a depressing mood as i am.
    All the words you have written here just fall into place. The flow was outstanding. The imagery was so vivid.. I just love it.. I am at a loss for words here..
    And i do think i am going to bookmark this.
    BREATHTAKING!
    Outstanding job.
    -Mandi


  • stylization
    October 6, 2008
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    This is lovely. I love the imagery of the thorns here; it flows well and was a wonderful read.


  • XxVampirePoetxX
    October 6, 2008
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    WOW...

    This is a really good write.
    I'm sorry you are going through a time like this in your life.


  • September Daydreams
    October 6, 2008
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    It's beautiful and dark.I enjoyed what you're trying to transmit.First stanza was my favorite.


  • chilali
    October 6, 2008
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    BrandonHerron270!! This poem is amazing! I don't know how to describe what I loved about it, but loved it, I did! Great imagery and beautiful flow of words. And the title, just goes so perfectly and it's just so beautiful. Great work!


    • BrandonHerron270
      October 6, 2008
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      read the final version if you like, and give me a poem of yours to read.


    • BrandonHerron270
      October 6, 2008
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      Thank you

      but it wasn't finished. at least, wasn't until just now.

      • chilali
        October 6, 2008

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        Wow! I loved the last stanza! Omg! So beautiful! The poem is so much better now that it is there. Well done!!! I love it! And umm. I don't know what poem to give you haha! Just go to my page! Hopefully you will enjoy my writes I look forward to reading so much more from you Brandon!

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