I never meant it to be (like this)
bloodstains after a night of bliss
satin sheets burned by candle wax
reminders of a heart turned black
And I can't sleep at night,
taste your tears
when I close my eyes
haunted by your sighs and lips
longing for your phantom kiss
should have known
(it was far worse than it seemed)
and I should have said I'm sorry
(when you screamed)
I can't sleep at night,
taste your tears
when I close my eyes
haunted by your thighs and hips
tortured by your fingertips
never thought it'd take this long
never knew I'd be so strong
to shrug and smile (at your advance)
an offer of a second chance
you cried (when you kissed me)
maybe regret brought you back
But I'm not ready for what this could mean
afraid of waking
losing just a twisted dream
it's been too long to matter now
my bitter heart just can't allow
so I might still walk away
before the daylight breaks
Author notes
no clue why or who or what, but no there's no murder
Critiques welcomed
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That I like!
I love how so many of the verses make you think you just read it only to go back and see it's COMPLETELY different. It has a great flow, and even in a spot or two where the meter stumbles the flow is still a flood begging to be understood. I'm not sure what YOUR meaning was, but I liked lines 25-27. You never really know what it will be like without someone, but sometimes you reach a point where there is too much pain NOT to try it alone. It's scary, it's cold, and it's dark. But wholly survivable. Amazing. Thank you for this.
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wow its amazing, maybe i am just throwing it into my situation that i am going through right now, but to me it sounds like they had cheated and they are missing them and just want one more chance, but when she tried to even kiss it made her realize that she couldn't do it. so he sees that and decided to walk away before the daylight breaks. that is how i am interpreting the poem. even if i got it wrong it is still a very beautiful poem.
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