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Say Something, Spricht Mit Mir

Always so quiet
Thoughtful and alone
Spricht mit mir
Dann werden alles okay sein

I don't know what you're thinking
You never say a thing
Bitte spricht mit mir
Ich kann dich helfen

I see your eyes
Filled with hate and sorrow
Spricht mit mir
Ich werde hineindenken

Unclench your fist
Reject your rage
Spricht mit mir
Und macht deinen Hass weg

You don't really want to do this
Hurt innocent peers
Spricht mit mir
Es macht nicht, was sie sagen

They hurt you
Did things that can never heal
Bitte spricht mit mir
Du bist nicht allein

Author notes

Song: Nur Ein Wort von Wir Sind Helden (Only One Word by We Are Heroes). Since I chose a song in German, I wrote part of it in German. Not promising my German is perfect or amazing. I also posted the entire thing in English, but I think it sounds better mixed because the person is trying as hard as they can to get someone to talk to them insead of doing something stupid. Like you would do anything to stop someone from doing something, that's basically what this is about. Someone trying to convince someone not to do somehting.

I am Note The Sarcasm. However, no sarcasm is used here.

Here's the English version: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4656967

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  • judmc
    February 1

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    Prima !!

    Ein ganz schoenes Poemchen,fliest gut und ist wunderbar zu leson.Dichten sie ruhig weiter immer noch
    Best Wishes... George.....

  • She Stole My Voice
    December 1, 2008

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    When I saw the title,
    I immediately thought 'bitte spring nicht.'
    I love the way you used german and english.
    Your German is very well :]
    Good luck in the contest ♥

    -Rainbow.


  • ZachP silver member
    October 12, 2008

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    Amazing, in the simplest terms. I love the interweaving of English and German.

    Simple, but very powerful.
    Danke Schoen


  • HereComesTheSun
    October 9, 2008
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    good luck in the contest a very well written piece that deserves gold


  • Mistress Masquerade
    October 6, 2008

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    I like tihs matage, if only I knew the German.. Because I'm sure it sounds really cool. best o fluck in the contest.

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