A fam’ly outing to the pool,
high summer fun, to splash, get cool!
Our son of ten, enrolled in Swim
at nearby county pool and gym
insisted that I dive and fetch
the ring he’d tossed out deep (the wretch!)
Far off, with children, husband played,
my son insisted (as he stayed
attached upon the pool-side wall)
“It isn’t THAT deep, after all!
Just go and get it and be done!
Remember, I’m your fav’rite son!"
I rolled my eyes and prayed and dove,
snagged ring and back to air I strove;
The little twerp swam out to wait
and jumped my back (his teasing trait
was one we never cured him of)
I thrashed and choked and hit and shoved!
At last I reached wall’s refuge sweet,
apology I thought he’d bleat;
instead, reproval for my scene,
“You didn’t have to be so mean!”
I curtly shared with Sonny-clown,
in childhood I had nearly drowned!
And to this day held rigid fear
that wat'ry death still hovered near.
In disbelief, he said, I quote:
“Don’t worry Mom! You know, ‘Fat floats!’”
Author notes
True story!
In a list
A contest entry
- Gimme a laugh! by Riamh.
600 points, ended October 13, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Laugh by Pollycheck.
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Thank you for entering my contest. It sure is interesting when you listen to what children play. They often innocently tell the truth withour realizing what it actually sounds like.
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OMG this is too funny. Don't you just love kids and what comes out of their sweet little mouths! This is a great write. And since fat floats, I'll never drown!!
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I agree with Reb, as far as males, they should stay silent while their ahead! Great story and the rhyme plus meter carry it with a bit of whimsy, almost as if I hear your voice giving in to the irony of the moment with sheepish tinge. Blue
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOH! Bad, bad boy! I can relate.
This is funny,
but as for Sonny...
He can answer to me!
Great fun, great rhyme!
Note:Unquote in wrong direction:
I’m your fav’rite son!“
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Oh my goodness! Typical male, They intend to make things better and the moment they open their mouths, things just get worse!
I'm sorry to laugh at your expence, but it was really funny! Not the fact that you have a fear of water NO! but how your 10 year old replied to this event!
You did good with this poem!
Thank you for sharing!
Becks
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Absolutely DELIGHTFUL
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Nifty!
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I might leave a really big word on this comment because your author page says you like words.
OK... your poem is conspicuously excellent. My friend, Individuality, told me to say that sometime, so now I did. And I love your poem enough for it, really and truly. 
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Thank you, Melodies, for a lovely comment and beautiful words!
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