"Follow along" she said with her smirk.
So I followed along, in her pitiful game,
She brought out her scale, then cried "Get to work!"
"I'll help you steal yourself from all shame."
Her face was as white as a snow angel's wings,
And she floated with the lightest grace.
Full purity, she sways and she swings,
But I couldn't see behind that white face.
She says to walk on the cracks of thin ice,
and if you fall and drown, you'll pay.
Imperfection has a dreadful price,
when you know that Ana didn't say.
So here I am falling, becoming so weak,
My bones, as frail as toothpicks, drop.
The world around me seems so chilly and bleak,
And I realize that "Ana Says" must stop!
I listened to her orders, and I stared her in the eye,
She's stabbing deep, but will not get her way.
With painful tears, I said "goodbye"
Then she left me...
...because "Ana didn't say."
Author notes
October 5, 2008... This poem is a sequal to my poem "Ana Says": http://allpoetry.com/poem/2733972
It's like that game "Simon says" when you're a little kid... only when you get older, "Simon" becomes "Ana" and well, things change... a lot. This poem is pretty much about how I recovered from an ED back when I was sixteen. I chose to personify "Ana"... If you just refuse her orders enough, eventually, she gets tired of you and leaves.
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I remember your previous poem 'Ana Says' very clearly. I believe you entered that one in a previous contest I held.
Excellent write, and I love the Simon Says "parody" (for lack of a better word).
Great write!
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"Imperfection has a dreadful price"
That is so true.
I can relate to a lot of this and you expressed it so well.
I'm glad you were able to recover dearie.
-abi x x x
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i love the ana is a person now. it makes it seem easier to say goodbye. this poem is just amazing and i'm so glad you were able to recover. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck
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I really love this poem...it really captures the feelings someone feels when suffering from anorexia...i read the first one aswell...they are both brilliant poems...well done! im so glad you overcame her! i still cant ='[
anyhow thanks for entering my contest and good luck to you! =] -
I like it, it's different. I like how you say that if you refuse to her she'll leave, wouldn't you think possibly she could insted just rage out on you? I liked your poem, very good write. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Ooh...that's pretty dark, actually! Yeah, I read the title and the first thing I thought was, "Simon Says".
There are some places where what you are trying to say is confusing: "I'll help you steal yourself from all shame." for example. I'm not quite sure what that means.
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I like how this is part of a 2 poem thing, very clever. I think this is a real good portayal of the battle between ana and what is 'right' that goes on in so many heads. Im very happy though to hear you've said goodbye to he all. Love the personification too, tis how I'd imagine he to look.
Overall great write, keep it up!
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I like this, the way you put ana says" because it really is like that, the voice in the back of your head telling you what to do and what you shouldnt do
im glad you had the willpower to overcome her!
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I love this. I love the personification of "Ana." Very well done.
Dare I say one of your best yet?
Good luck on the contest.
Garrison
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