I fell today
But it didn't hurt...
It left no marks,
I didn't bleed.
I cut myself today
But I didn't feel it...
It didn't leave a scar
It didn't even bleed.
I'm just so tired
Of not feeling anything
I've become so numb
I'd rather feel pain
I just want to feel!
I want proof I'm alive
I want to live
I want to feel.
I finally feel something
Since I found you
I feel alive now...
I am no longer numb
You opened my eyes
And helped me feel
I built a wall
around my heart
But you came along
And tore it down.
I just wanted to feel
Just something...
I'd become so numb
I would have rather felt pain.
Author notes
something I wrote a little while ago... yeah, I don't remember when I wrote it, though... anyways, what'd you think?
Please Tell Me What You Think
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This is a very touching poem. It starts out raw and kind of angry and turns into an emotional kind of romantic poem. I love that! that's cool to see. I really like this one!! Very nice job! <33 =]
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I can relate to this poem. I feel like this on and off all the time. It was great when that someone was able to tear down my wall but sadly they are the reason my wall in back up again.
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I enjoyed the insight. I don't really under stand the craving to cut, but the more poems like this that I read, the more I understand the feeling of people who do.
Well done.
Mike -
i really liked this piece!!!! so much meaning and emotion!!!
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this is good i can definitely relate to what you were feeling and finally waking up to emotion [so to speak] this was good
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very deep the great thing about poetry is that the reader can make any sense at of what the writer has wrote. At first i thought that mabe you were paralized but it was your heat that was nice methopors and smiliers nice flow and very intreging peic
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There are some great ideas in this poem, partially the second last stanza.
"You opened my eyes
And helped me feel,
I build a wall
around my heart,
But you came along
and tore it down".
That is my fav part, a new lover to bring back feelings lost. It could do with some more emotion thrown in, but overall a fine write. -
The sixth stanza describes a wonderful feeling of how friendship or intimacy can light up a life
(but the last stanza is a little bit confusing)> -
It sounds like you found someone special. I think it kicks ass. Great job.
Mike
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