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through the looking glass.

staring at the moon with stars in their palms
hoping for some recognition;
they distastefully breathed
      -in and out
and no truce was established.

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prompt: midnight rendezvous.
5 lines only.

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  • Errant Panther gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    a little abstract and creatively expressed, although you state "no truce was established" it gave me a sense of serenity as I read.


  • aanika
    October 14, 2008

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    *jawdrop*
    insert here
    hahahaha jks.
    anywho, I love this like youuu.
    'staring at the moon with stars in their palms'
    that's so pretty I love space imagery.


  • Glasyalabolas
    October 12, 2008
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    This is one of the things that I like about line or word limited pieces, not only does every word count, but the interpretation of the pieces can be so open that it can be many things to many different readers and this piece highlights that very effectively.

    Good write.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    very nicely done.
    I truly enjoyed read your words.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • innocence jaded.xx
    October 5, 2008

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    Wow, love, this is amazinggg ! haha, no seriously.
    You'll probably do better in this thang than muwah
    because this
    is pure
    brillianceee !!
    i lerrrve your writing
    ♥

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