A pretty girl,
wrapped in razor bones
and skinny smiles.
She is a phenomenon
in herself,
playing music on xylophone ribs
and breathing in
stomach acid euphoria.
A dysfunction
to the outside world
and the norm inside her private hell,
she is stagnant
in her attempts to be free.
Only a star in the mirror
when her cheekbones are sharp
and her eyes will cut
you if you mention
the unmentionable.
A model inmate in the hospital
and a failure in the bathroom,
retching up her misery
daily, hourly.
It is never enough madness to make
this pretty girl thin.
Corrupt beauty
found in glamour magazines
tells her she must be
emaciated to be lovely.
Only size zero
will sparkle and shine and
the fat on her bones
and the turmoil in her soul
will show in the mirror.
Her eyes are unforgiving
and her view is forever flawed.
Inner riots binge and purge against
hunger, alcohol and air.
She will languish in an infinite
death mask and will never be
a Pretty girl.
Author notes
Contest Entry for the word bank option. I used all the words.
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A contest entry
- [Thin.As.Air] by Dead Star--x.
525 points, ended October 21, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GOT GOLD? Calling all single silvers..... by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended November 13, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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"Her eyes are unforgiving" and "She will languish in an infinite death mask and will never be a Pretty girl." these both are probably the most amazing lines i've read. they're so true and just so sad. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck
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wow...i loved this! i can relate so well...
'Her eyes are unforgiving
and her view is forever flawed.
Inner riots binge and purge against
hunger, alcohol and air.' Loved that!
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No wonder this one has won 2 trophies. It is gritty and true, and does not hold back. This plague upon America is not glamorous, and you've caught that and thrust it into the lime light. This needed to be written and I'm glad you did. This couldn't have been done any more powerfully. Perfect
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Such a poignant poem, which addresses a real problem in today's society. An excellent piece! Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!
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A model inmate in the hospital
and a failure in the bathroom
Her eyes are unforgiving
and her view is forever flawed.
amazing poem you did a lovely job loved it much,
vanna -
win
for sure. this poem is lovely in its tragedy. -
This is powerful. The imagery is stark and the feeling you convey is one of aching desperation. Very impressive.
Garrison
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this is beautifully written about such a contraversial subject.I loved the way it flowed WOW!
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you [blew] me away♥
this is very hard hitting and poetic
Finalist <3
♥
Dead Star--x
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