The wind sweeps my hair again
This familiar feeling taking hold of me
Is it Déjà vu or is it just you in my mind coming through?
A smell triggers a memory so strongly
Only then do I remember so vividly
A time I never think about and vaguely recall
Until the chill of the fall
I finally awaken
To a mind that is shaken
To where it needs to be
So refreshing thinking of a time when I was just me
A contest entry
- Prewrite contest by Blue-Rose Beauty.
600 points, ended November 10, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you share some very nice turns of phrase in this poem. i particularly like the 3rd, 6th and final lines.
nicely done.
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Is it Déjà vu or is it just you in my mind coming through?
Love that line. The ending is very strong, sometimes a guy can change you for the first, but then also for the better.
This was a very good write, the imagery was nice and I could feel the emotional
Thanks for entering
- Blue
beauty
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Beautiful. Absolutely astounding. I loved the flow, the beauty of it. The almost uncertanity at the end. Great work. You've only entered one poem into the contest and you hit on the head with it. 90 out of a 100 great work. You've made the finalist. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy
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true...
I love the drifting thoughts in the beginning, and the conclusion at the end is especially touching (and original). Very nicely put.
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I love this. The last line is probably my favorite.
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