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forgive me

forgive me

 

I have no words to really say.

Honestly, I feel empty again.

Darling, you made me whole inside,

like normal.

But I ruined things.

 

As we speak,

I'm staring at white paper

and memories of my big mouth

and empty words.

[I said things I didn't mean]

 

Hearing noises of my thoughts on paper,

all that comes to mind is what I really mean,

 

"Forgive me".

 

 

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Pic Credit: http://shutterbug13.deviantart.com/art/forgive-me-45700421

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  • Dead creature
    February 22

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    Aww, your written words are
    Truthful,Honest,Heart taking very good
    well said it brings me memories...

    Well done
    xoXO
    vivian~


  • wwfhrocks14
    February 22

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    Aww. wow this is really awesome. i think many people can relate to this. in relationships i have the big mouth and i let words fly out... one's i often regret. great poem. i could almost hear your voice.


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    February 19
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    Aww...I loved this! I is just precious!


  • GothicFyre
    February 19
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    Nice stuff, great writing. Loved the natural flow of the writing


  • Maybe Anastasia
    February 19

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    oh. my. gosh. this is amazing. I didnt think I would like it at first glance but it totally sucked me in. Ive been there. its not a fun place. great write!


  • penman gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    Wonderful

    antoher terrific expressin for the image. So very well done. thank you for sharing.


  • catalyst.
    October 6, 2008
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    It short and simple and completely amazing. I love it.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    umm my dear bodyguard she wanted 60 lines or more.
    I'll be to read this soon


    kat


    • lowercase prelude gold member
      October 6, 2008
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      oh really? must've missed that
      i'll remove it from the contest than
      because i don't feel like re-writing it

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