Painting a hopeless canvsas
bleeding colors onto the lilac sheets
masterpieces become translucent
melting into a puddle
Fading into history
A contest entry
- 20 entries:: 20 words --PROMPT♥ by etoile.
450 points, ended October 8, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
criticm welcome.
Comments
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oooh i loved this one, short sweet original
a masterpiece !! -
this was beautiful. i loved the way this was written with so much imagery. it was a wonderful poem. great take on the prompt. i really liked the ending that you used
thanks for entering and goodluck
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very lovely piece indeed.
although I am a stickler for grammatic errors lol.
I'll just point out a few,
hopless - hopeless cansas - canvas
masterpeices - masterpieces
don't mind me, I just find spelling mistakes very distracting and unpleasing to the eye.
But other than that, excellent piece! & good luck in the contest!
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wow, this poem is amazing, i also read the rust one, ur an awsome poet
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