the gravity
that held you positioned
was by no stretch, my fault.
the criss-crossed bands
surrounding Saturn’s rings
were more like us,
than you’d guess.
Author notes
prompt: constellation
you and me are more of a constellation
than all the stars in our solar system.
In a list
A contest entry
- 15::25 Quickie♥ by innocence jaded.xx.
300 points, ended October 7, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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the criss-crossed bands
surrounding Saturn’s rings
were more like us,
than you’d guess.
ooooh I like 'criss-crossed bands'
that's a really really cool image.
you don't need the comma after 'us'
love youu.
& congratulationssss on the silverrrr. -
wow
this is really well-written
expressed somewhat of a love interest, type thing =)
great job on achieving silver! -
my goodness
you sure said a mouthful with this one
honest and powerful
excellent piece
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Wowww. I loved this. You portrayed that word so beautifully, and just wow. I'm in complete awe. Very well written. I absolutely loved this.
Thanks for entering & good luck, doll ♥
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woooot.
your word, love, is:
constellation.
do with it what you pleasssse !
♥
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