Stars twinkle,
As I sigh.
Remembering your face within the skies.
How I wish we could be together like we were.
In the long summer nights.
Author notes
Prompt: midnight rendezvous
A contest entry
- 5 Lines Of Wonder by Errant Panther.
460 points, ended October 17, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
whispering in your ear
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very soft and soothing piece, just remember though that "possessive" statements (eg: "I washed the car today") the i should always be capitalised.
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the i's are fixed. there is reason for this. i forget to cap some things due to the fact that i write and the words just keep flowing without me realizing that some things need certain things, i am just used to chat lingo and not used to capping the i's, and i also write a lot in the submissive form (as in dom/submissive lifestyle) but thanks for pointing it out.
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Now, this sounds like something I would write,
my style of poetry.
I really enjoyed this piece.
Good luck in the contest
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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this is pretty and sensual, for only five lines. I like this piece. Good luck in the contest.
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