Garments tie-dyed in opaqueness
ripped into long frayed threads
woven into fine veils
worn over the faces
of glass intentions
Author notes
PROMPT: translucent
A contest entry
- 20 entries:: 20 words --PROMPT♥ by etoile.
450 points, ended October 8, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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as they say
a picture is worth a thousand words. Without one that is tangable, it is hard to paint that picture with 20 words.
I've read some of your other works and you should definantly post something else. You have a great talent. -
Good job
You had good imagery, and sometimes simplicity is good but I think this poem could be better if you put more details into it, maybe so we can see what you were describing or what the purpose of the poem was. -
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thanks for the comment, or for even taking the time to read it for that matter.
I agree, i need to work on so many different areas of writing. i was really trying to make due with the 20 word limit that i had, and when i saw the other entries..OMG i was so blown away by the talent.
hey, thanks again for checkin me out and leaving some input, thats what i like. much love and respect to you
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Very interesting write. Wonderful imagery. I am wondering what picture you had in your head?
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i liked the imagery in this it was wonderfully written. amazing take on the prompt, it was a very nice poem to read. i really enjoyed it.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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Lovely!
Should be put on beautifully colored wallpaper. 
I have this idea that if smart sayings were to be written in fine script on wallpaper, we'd all get smarter. 
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