The thrill of your grunting face
twisted in beastial bliss
as my cock soothed the urge
for love in all the right places
Your back arched in psychotic
splendor, ass blown up
with the helium of time
Thighs chuckling with cellulite
craters too funky to go unnoticed
Oh how you took me there
up to the rafters of ecstasy
as you slid on my dick
with your contorted belly,
jigglin baby moma drama
while doing tricks
Yes girl I'm totally whipped
to your delicious
mmm! yeah vicious sweet
lovin in all it's rhetorical
glory
Your ugly feels so good baby,
in fact I would have to name
it exotic and primal
Because it makes me crow
cocka doodle doo
with my body doing spasms
of jubilant madness
reminiscent of an african
tribal dance underneath a
possessed moon
A contest entry
- ugly love by Cat.
2750 points, ended October 24, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thighs chuckling with cellulite
what a fantastic line- makes me want to borrow it...lol.. but i won't- i promise
this piece achieves what i think you were going for.. it moves and shakes and
shimmies down the page with all the movement you have written it
chuckles and blown up, to the rafters , and spasms.. and tribal dancing
i envy someone who can portray movement so well..
a very nice piece.. really glad to find it here
m
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''Your back arched in psychotic
splendor, ass blown up
with the helium of time
Thighs chuckling with cellulite
craters too funky to go unnoticed''
oh this section was grand!!!
Thank you for this entry in the contest
you did ugly so very well!!!
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My, my, my darrell, you got down in the dirt dirty dirt, didn't you? Yes! Whew! I am speechless! OK!?
Renee
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WOW!!! Great write I found another writer to read
I loved this!!!!
Your ugly feels so good baby,
in fact I would have to name
it exotic and primal
Because it makes me crow
cocka doodle doo
with my body doing spasms
of jubilant madness
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Big girls need love too!!! This was really good!!!
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WOW CAUGHT IN THIUGHT NICE LOVE VERY NICE
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jigglin baby moma drama
while doing tricks
Yes girl I'm totally whipped
to your delicious
mmm! yeah vicious sweet
lovin in all it's rhetorical
glory
lololol...
You're a mess a mess a mess
Gawd, do you ever stop? No, I was kidding, this is wonderful, you poor thing
Love ya,
jin
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Man!
so you at it again!? l.o.l. Yeah, sound like a whipped
kid from what ole girl put on you! l.o.l. good stuff my friend!
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You have a lot in this that is so very interesting.
could you move it to the left side? I think Cat has that as a rule? I would hate to not consider this.
Thank you 
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EXCELLENT!! I love the details and descriptions in this write!! You did a perfect job portraying this piece!!! This is a very brilliant write!! I can tell that you put a lot of thought into this!! You did an amazing job!! Its wonderful from start to finish!! I love it!!
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very befitting to the parameters of the contest and its prompt. I love the ending, incredibly strong imagery, as is the case with most of the writes of yours I have had the pleasure of perusing.
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