your errant kiss upon my lips
like day old donut holes
and puddles without rain
I put away my tired umbrella
and sprinkle cookie crumbs in linen
A contest entry
- 5 Lines Of Wonder by Errant Panther.
460 points, ended October 17, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the opening line to this, but the meaning has become lost to me amid the abtract nature of the piece. definitely original and creative, on that basis well done.
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i loved the title so much. this piece had such amazing imagery and was written very well for only a 5-liner. goodluck in the contest
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Love the title ~ and your poem is just fabulous, splendid thoughts and imagery. Well penned!.. x
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I must say that I am a bit lost on this piece,
but it probably me, I have been known to be
on the slow side at times LoL
Good luck in the contest.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Cookie crumbs sound way more interesting than petals spread on linen
This is fab!
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lol I think Jess will love the donut hole reference
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utterly wicked deviance as always Tim.
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love this title..so many threads of inspiration hanging from them. 5 lines of wonder, I think you deserve gold just for the title.
day old donut holes. .
lol
bummer.
good luck,
jin
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