Clouded stars, misted moon,
thunder barking, booming
on hills fortifying horizons;
is like a banquet of the heart,
a feast to share with you.
Author notes
Prompt: midnight rendezvous
A contest entry
- 5 Lines Of Wonder by Errant Panther.
460 points, ended October 17, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I take this piece to be a metaphor for the confusion that love creates being like a storm that is about to break over ones head, if I'm wrong forgive me.
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Thank you very much. Yes, it can definately be taken as such, even a metaphor for trepidation on feelings and emotions connected to a love that might be troublesome ie. getting involved in an affair for instance.
It can also be taken at face value, the beauty of watching a night storm, enjoyed mutually by two people in love who find a peace within the vision of turmoil that nature is presenting them.
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Now... I am really loving this,
very lovely job. Your whole 5
lines are so pretty and sweet and tender.
Good luck in the contest.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Thank you very much. It is good to work on line or word limited short pieces.
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