A wave of fury passed by me ,
When I heard this news ,
What had happened, what went wrong,
To this I had no clues.
Someone else's groom he is going to be,
abandoning all the flowers in my heart's lea.
With his magical words on the web world,
He drew me to sanctity of space with me in his arms curled .
How I wish I could fly to where he was
And talk to him for long hours.
How do I question him why did you do this to me ?
Because never did he say that he loved me...
How insane am I ,
To fall in love with such a guy .
How do I tell him,
I imagined myself in his arms
we dancing together
whenever I heard a sotto beat.
How do I tell him,
I have actually written
several poems just to impress him.
How do I tell him ,
how bitterly I cried
the night I read his mail &
how I imagined
him to be my prince ,
just like it is in the fairy -tales.
Baptised by the first stroke of love,
I had started talking to the flowers,
& fly high with the dove .
I was ecstatic with joy ,
And felt.. yes , this is my DREAM BOY ..
How can anything so beautiful end in an instance,
I came to know,
And I am sure ,
I wont be able to LOVE anyone
like this ANYMORE !
My parents tried to comfort me ,
and friends consoled,
But a tender heart 16yrs old says,
I'll never be able to forget him,
in-spite of whatever being told.
In the journey of life,
my first love left me,
and got crushed by destiny.
Oh, Almighty, I pray to you,
falling on my knee,
make me realise it was no pure love ,
was just an INFATUATION may be ....
-Ankita Ashesh.
Author notes
This is the story of a young girl who fell in Love with a guy via internet ... she had never seen or heard him ... still she loved him ...She was so excited about her first feeling of the most beautiful thing in this world -LOVE and then one day sky falls over her when she comes to know that her love is getting married to someone else .... so here is her incomplete love story....
-Ankita Ashesh.
# 4
A contest entry
- Say It All by Aun Ali.
600 points, ended October 28, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Anything And Everything~ by Captain Jenny.
1030 points, ended April 1, 54 entries
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Comments
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very bittersweet..
you had great imagery in this piece and did a good job displaying some emotions about a love based on a 'fairytale that all too often only ends right..in a FAIRYTALE..nice work lady..
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Interesting. I liked the way this was written. I think it might have been better had the points of the pain and confusion been better displayed. For your second poem, you've earned 15 points. You have a total of 35 points. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kahy
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment , well I ll keep your advice in mind while writing something in future .Thanks once again .
-Ankita A
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awwwwwwww
So sad. This hurts at 16........ it hurts in your 40's also. The net is such a hard place to fall in love. even if you find someone who is real and true and you find real true love, you have to contend with the distance. I hope you healed from this. You will fall in love again. True love is worth all and you have to risk being destroyed to find it. I often say it is a leap off of a cliff to the rocks below and you hope the one you love catches you. If they don't ........ you are broken on the rocks. Great write and God bless you, Mark
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Thank you spiritual poet ... I am glad you read my poem and moreover understood my feelings thoroughly . The net is not a hard place to fall in love for a 16 year old ... and I truly agree "True love is worth all "
Thanks once again for your comment .
-Ankita A
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goodd
thisss is goodd
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Thank you so much !
-Ankita A
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Beautiful. This brought tears to my eyes.
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Thank you .
Regards - Ankita .
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This is such a lovely story... So beautiful yet sad. Thanks for entering
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Thank you so much for your comment Lae ... I am glad you liked it !!!
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inspired by a true story i guess..........n may b i know the concerned person ;)
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wel wel wel ... wat i can say is that you never know ... wat it is ..
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Thank you for entering your poem in my contest
what a terrible way to fall in love and also lose love
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Beautiful
Wow, well what can I say to this but my heart goes out for the person in this poem. How perfect first love is and how harsh its loss can be is something that inspires a great many of my own poetry. Beautifully written.
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Thank you so much for your comment . I am glad you liked it
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Thanks for the comment !!
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very nice write you have here. great take on the prompt full of emotions to the end. loved it thanks for your entry and best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
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Thank you for your most heartfelt entry, Josie
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{infatuation} = one of my favourite word. there's something just so intesly enticing about it.
_baptised_ = verry sweet line!
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Thank you I am glad u liked it . so I can expect myself to have a stand in the preliminary finalists alteast LOL !!
-Ankita A.
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Thank you for your entry.
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what great work i hope you enter other contests of mine.
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Thank you .
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What a great ending! Maybe it hurts less if we can say its just infatuation. I have also been here ' "Someone else's groom he is going to be"
Thank you for the entry.
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I like this poem, because there is a sense of originality in it. It suits the type of poem I wished for. Thank you to enter it into this contest. All the best.
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THANK YOU SO MUCH !!!
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oh I am so sorry a lonely person can find what they believe to be happiness in the strangest of places. And there are people out there who will prey on the innocent and the lonely. You have written a very personal poem here. Thanks for sharing your feelings. And thanks for joining my contest.
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Thanks for your thoughtful comment !
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awesome, lots of feeling in this, sorry though. if someone proposed to me by writing this poem for me i'd have to say no, i don't think my mom would let me get married lol. no, it's good though, maybe if i were older
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LOL ... oh that's fine ... thanks for being frank and reading my poem !
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A.w.e.s.o.m.e
Love on the internet, it's just so bittersweet. Very very very very very very nicely written! =D
*bows*
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THANK YOU SO MUCH !
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I really like the way you wrote this. very heartfelt and full of emotion.
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Thanks for reading my poem . I am glad u liked it.
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This is a great poem but not right for my contest sorry x
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Thank you for going through my poetry ... actually there was no subject mentioned in your contest so I thought this would go with it .... but its ok .... I am sorry if I bothered you !
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Nah you didn't bother me it was actually just sentimental poems for me, as I am considering leaving and it's nice to know people want you to stay
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Oh wow.....
I actually love this, it took my breath away. I love the way you concluded your feelings to be "was just an INFATUATION"
Well done on the way your poem is quite long compared to others, but right until the last line you had my full attention
Well done, good luck and thank you for entering my contest.
Rebecca
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Thank you so much for your comment . I am glad u liked it .
- Ankita.
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How sad a poem can be to find the one you love then have it taken from you like that. This once happened to me...it's one of the main reasons I'm now goth or emo as some people think. This poem was very beautiful...thank you for entering.
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thanks for the consolation ..... m glad u liked reading it !
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Ankita i wont make any commetn about this poem
because this poem is too good to make comment
i think i know your feelings
because once i became numb too
and thats why i love the song Numb by Linkin Park
cheer up
the life is waiting for you
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This is so heartbreaking. An original view on love (via internet) What lies may they weave on such an open playground as the web. You learn so much about yourself and your life does change when your heart is broken. Im glad that this event did not stop you from writing, and I hope that realization of infatuation finds you, and you move on with a full heart. well done. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!
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