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Unchanged

I screamed.
But you were deaf.

I touched.
You couldn't feel.

I moved,
Your focus was unchanged.

I am invisible.

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  • etoile
    October 8, 2008

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    good take on the prompt. it was nicely written. i liked the way you used the senses to portray the prompt: 'translucent' great job.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    This was great write.
    You used powerful examples and you let them speak for themselves


  • Joy.To.The.World
    October 5, 2008
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    This is really good and sad. I liked that its really short it made it have more of an impact