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An unsure girl....

Search the world
Mystic eyes unfurled
Affection sought
Longing for more
Exploring dreams
Delight awhirl
Hope adrift
Eyes continuously search

A contest entry

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  • poet2angels gold member
    October 5, 2008
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    Excellent poem!
    TY for entering!

    Lynda


  • Joy.To.The.World
    October 5, 2008

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    I think this is really good and in no need on revision but the line "deligth awirl" doesnt really make sense to me. Good write.
    ~joy


    • kermie4201
      October 5, 2008
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      Well I guess I was trying to say that her joy is misplaced.