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the summer of the stag-beetles

the first I knew was the West Indians

saying Laad! Laad! and laughing

 

it was a hot one and folk (I heard)

were sleeping out on Peckham Rye

and when each sweat-till-you’re-dry

afternoon swung away to evening

and got redder in the way the light

hit things

 

                   there were these lines

of little black men slanting across

the pavement antlers at present-arms

on some scuttling mission followed

by littler beetles

 

                      a couple of hard boys

leered and crunched them and we

threw stones and they said fuck off

and we know where you fucking live

but we threw more stones and then

just watched those little black men

crossing and crossing the pavement

 

then it rained dollops like half-crowns

making that sour smell only thin flags

of concrete can make

 

                    and the half-crowns made

brown leopard-spots on the grey dust

 

and we went inside

 

        the sweat-till-you’re-dry weather

went away and though I looked

 

                     on every half-sunny day

 

              so did those little black men

 

 

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  • Dalaney gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    i have no doubt this was your ten year old voice I can just see you throwing stones, sweating mad at those boys...my God, this is a fabulous write. Thank you so much, my little rebel friend Love, Lane


  • deercatcher
    October 6, 2008

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    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4438285
    Something I remember about 1968
    We had no airconditioning then
    slept with knee in the windowsill
    breeze of attic fan in face
    a wet washcloth nearby for wiping
    something to evaporate and cool

  • SoulWhispher
    October 6, 2008

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    Well DOne

    You really did well on this one, it should be a contest winner "GOLD". I really enjoyed the read. all I can say is great job, blessings John


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 6, 2008
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      Thanks, John.

      I have to chuckle. Every time anyone mentions "gold", the poem bombs in the contest.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 6, 2008

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    This is so great!! You truly did a marvelous job writng this!! Your portrayal is truly excellent!! This is an amazing piece!! Your writes are always so good!! I love it!!


  • jimmy20johns gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    Such a nice piece. Like Jeff, I smelled the rain with you. 1968 - I was in Grosvenor Square when the police lines nearly broke before they their mounted charge sent us helter skelter. And the damned Vietnam war went on (and on). Ah, memories (although I've never seen a live stag beetle - yet.)


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 6, 2008
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      I remember the news stories - Vietnam, Grosvenor Square, Prague - but most of all I really do remember those stag-beetles. Thank you.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    Screw the rules Mairi strikes again!

    I love the poem though

    I love those huge old penny rainsplatters

    the smell they make

    the whole feel of your poem is bang on.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 5, 2008
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      Thank you. I am beginning to detest rules. Stag beetles are what I remember from being ten, and that's that! it was 1968, and they were everywhere.


      • cricketjeff gold member
        October 5, 2008
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        1968 was the Aussies, I was at the Oval with a broom twice my size
        beating the Aussies!

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