I can see the lies in my own life
I'm not here looking for the truth
I just want to go unnoticed
Sitting here in the corner booth
I cant be something I'm not
I can hear your cries from over here
And I still cant sleep at night
I cant find the purpose in my own choices
Ill turn my head again, this isn't my fight.
I can walk away from this
Knowing its your blood I'm washing clean
I'll pretend that its all okay,
I can convince myself its not as bad as it seems
I cant be who you want me to be
I can turn my head and walk away
I'll slip into the shadows once more
I don't want to be remembered
Whats there left to stand for?
I can hear your heart beat
Its slowly pounding in my head
Why is it up to me?
I keep replaying everything you said,
Your the reason I keep going
Nothing good can come from this
Its me or them, theres no walking away
Thats it, the choice was made
I wont be going home at the end of the day
It's my blood that stains the ground
I can hide my shame in the ceramic floor
My name that would be lost
No need to hide in the shadows anymore
You were right all along
Author notes
If you don't understand or if you thing it doesn't flow well enough then let me know. Comments would be nice please. Option 2.
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this takes a man to admit when ur wrong, I love this!
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Living in the shadows is an event that overtakes all of us at some stage or another, whether we want it to or not. Perhaps I didn't understand 100% what this was about - I'm thinking it's about the relationship that you feel you spoiled with your choices? but even if I'm wrong, there's always a few times in life when we don't feel strong enough, or able, to face the bad forces running against us, and so we hide until that strength is found within ourselves
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Hiding in the shadows is something we all do from time to time, reflecting on our lives and the choices we've made...it's a healthy thing to do. At the end of the day, we make whatever choices we think best at the time and we have to learn to live with them. I found this to be a very thought provoking piece.
Annie
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love it
I can see the lies in my own life
I'm not here looking for the truth
I just want to go unnoticed
Sitting here in the corner booth
I cant be something I'm not
I can hear your cries from over here
And I still cant sleep at night
I cant find the purpose in my own choices
Ill turn my head again, this isn't my fight.
is my fav bit and u should keep written fantastic stuff like -
I think your poem is fantastic the flow is great and your emotions have a great depth of feeling in them keeping the reader interseted good luck in the contest
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I like the poem and what it says. I think this line needs a word added or a word corrected, "Nothing good can from this", Other than that, your poem really sounds smooth and has a message. Well done.
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