I feel you in the memories
of my fingertips,
the live sound
of fresh bread’s cracking crust,
the smell
of wet, crushed ground.
Your words are poetry,
your voice the scream of birds
high above the clouds,
the chirp of sleepy crickets
between summer’s branches,
the soft wings’ claps of white butterflies.
They flow free like the oldest river,
they are more beautiful and lasting
than the Hanging Gardens of Semiramis
and wiser than Nimrod
who built Nineveh and Babylon.
I am locked inside the aura
of your existence,
of your eternity.
Your thoughts are colors
that paint my own dreams.
You are the salty tinge
of happy tears on my face,
the tiny wrinkles hanging to my eyelids
and the lifted edges of my lips
when I smile.
Author notes
This poem is posted to contest and supposed to stay anonymous.
Thank you for your visit and comments on my poem.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended October 17, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Snippets From A Laden Heart. by Poetryintheblood.
625 points, ended November 1, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank you for your most beautifully spoken entry, Josie
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I can see the cumpulsions of the love you have refered in your most beautiful poetic words revealing the truth of this life and this love as well..a touching defination of the relationship my friend..well done...and thanks for sharing such a heartfelt verse...
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Outstanding
Your love poetry is aleways inspired and sees you writing at your best. I am not surprised that tis won a gold trophy it is full of rich imagery and lawless expression. Congratulations on the gold.
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How beautifully ...
you sculpted this work of art; and how lovely LOVE sketched you into existence, in flutter, scream, whisper, dream ... Perfect.
Loved this!
Myra
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Nicely done.
I always like to read your words.
Jim
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There is a fine consciousness here. I love the details.
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This is absolutely gorgeous. Thank you for entering my contest.
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grand meter and imagery as always. good to read you as always, I have missed this site.
Tamara
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A beautiful write. Heartfelt. Excellent take on the prompt. Good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling and metaphor. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Very good closing lines. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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Oh my Buddha.
"I feel you in the memories
of my fingertips, "
I'm left speechless just by that line.
The rest of it is fantastic.
You started off strong and that's how you ended it.
Thank you for sharing and keep on writing :]
And you better win the contest
♥
-Rainbow. -
what a gorgeous piece, so many beautiful lines of metaphor here...
only one suggestion:
maybe change
/the soft wings’ claps of white butterflies./
to
/the soft wing-clap of white butterflies/
=)
I love this poem, so happy to read you this morning
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You Struck Zlato With This One
Just outstanding my dear - you seem to find love in every passing moment - every step you take - the poem flows like honey - love it - Bless God - Josipe - dobar dan -------------------------------------------------- smiles
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Sonja this is as always and usually divine
Where do you get these fresh imageries that take you in such a suave and mellow world that you forget any sour realities?
wonderfulllllllllllllllllll
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Dear friend --
from the days of last December, when I had the chance to read some of your most beautiful work for that amazing contest of poetry ( ) to now, your work has not dminished in the slightest. Many things have changed, but your poetry has not.
This is amazingly soft and beautiful, from the first words, that paint such a vivid thought in the eyes, to the close, this is glorious and graceful in the highest degree.
Cordially,
Zach -
The depth and the beauty of your love always shine through, my friend. Wonderfully soft and romantic piece that gives evidence to the changing powers of love. Beautiful, as always.
~ Nicolette
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The art of Love like the paints brush strokes of a masterpiece. This is very beautiful. I just love these lines. Your thoughts are colors that paint my own dreams.
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Humm..it seems the waves of your sentiments are the beauty of your love which are moving towards the sea of your heart..a wonderful piece scripted by your heart itself..well done..
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