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Jisei 2

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

What damns my heart

has dammed my sermons –

I am silenced

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    November 27, 2008

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    I'm Dumbstruck!

    This is so powerful. You said quite a mouthful here in 3 short lines! 'Out of the fullness of the heart the mouth speaks!' You paraphrased scripture in a Jisei. [I have to look up the form] Good going!


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      November 28, 2008
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      "Jisei" refers to a poem written by someone about to die. Often it is in haiku form, but it could be in other oriental styles. It was typically written by zen buddhist monks. I'm glad you liked this.


  • Mirthryl
    October 8, 2008

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    The love to preach is generally much greater than the will to self-correct. Yet few seem to morally dam the one in acknowlegement of the other. Beautifully applied homophone. Silent as the grave? I enjoyed it.


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    oh i love the damns/dammed play - stunning.

    love, lane

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 6, 2008
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      Homophones - oldest trick in the book, k-c.

      I like stunning you, especially with short stuff like this. Glad you like it.


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    a message worth knowing, a lesson in humility and wisdom, i think...excellent...'skid


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 5, 2008
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    Deep bow, taking hat off to the supreme poet.


  • DogFish silver member
    October 5, 2008
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    ...I, too, am silenced!




  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 5, 2008
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    Brilliant


  • notorious
    October 5, 2008

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    Brevity at its snappiest, perfectly-worded best.

    "dammed"
    I'm guessing you intended that, as opposed to 'damned'. I can't see you doing any typos.

    Jessica!!

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 5, 2008

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      That's right - "dammed" as in pent up, stopped, blocked. Sometimes I use the same word as a feminised form of "sired", but not here.

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