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The World Of Wait.

you sit in the shadow of falling leaves
that like your dreams seem to float
breathing hope into tired lungs
like the fresh autumn air.

and it is there that you wait
shivering in the crisp coolness
of this new season and
of these new realizations

Because like pink silk leaves
that now swoop and drop to the grass
your dreams have lost their wind
and on this bench you wait

for your world to restart
and new dreams ease in to place
when the voids of loss are filled
with the shining light of love

then you will move on
leave this world of wait and cold.
Of everchanging but always the same
and move into sweet blissful chaos.

Author notes

No embarrassing story for me, sorry



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  • Anjole-Of-The-Artz
    November 21
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    Wow

    This is beautiful!!!! My favorite lines are "breathing hope into tired lungs
    like the fresh autumn air." That really caught me off guard because it sounds like something I would write!!!!! <3 8]


  • just sam
    November 21
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    What a beautifully descriptive piece. Thankyou for entering.
    xx Sam


  • lesbian-in-love
    November 17

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    This was good but it really didn't hold myi attention. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest. Keep up the good work!


  • Florida Sunshine
    September 13

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    I think that nature and dreams always go hand in hand. Seasons beacon seasons, reaching in, touching a poets heart.

    I enjoyed reading your work, it was a real pleasure. I do appreciate you entering my contest. I hope to judge quickly.


  • Babesface
    August 9

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    This is a really great poem. The emotion is actually overwhelming it is so strong.
    It is full of imagery and similes and has a wonderful flow to it!
    The run-on-lines bring something extra to the poem that I really really enjoyed.
    My favourite images are the ones of the leaves.
    "You sit in the shadow of falling leaves"
    and
    "like pink silk leaves"
    Well done on a great write. Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest


  • The Fun House silver member
    June 13

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    The first two stanzas of this are so very strong. I find it to be so refreshing to read this piece. It lifts the spirits.


  • PhoenixFaith
    June 11
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    Very nicely written. I like the pictures you painted.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck

    Kate


  • Heva Feva
    June 6
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    Great job. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
    -heva


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 22

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    Lovely imagery. Background could definitely use an overhaul! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    March 18

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    I have to admit that the first thing I did was hide the background - it was brutal! I would consider toning it down a touch so that your poem can really stand on its own.

    Also, the inconsistency with the punctuation and capitalization was a little troubling to my English major editing complex. I found myself wondering if you'd done this on purpose?

    But all in all, the poem itself is very nice. There seems to be a bit of sadness woven into each stanza and yet hope breathes in the last.

    Nicely done. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest!

    - Beàn Sidħe


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    January 14

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    this is wonderful. Ir eally love this part:
    then you will move on
    leave this world of wait and cold.
    Of everchanging but always the same
    and move into sweet blissful chaos.

    This sounds like total nirvana. thanks for entering.


  • etoile
    December 12, 2008

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    nice poem. i really like the imagery but this background really hurts my eyes which made it almost impossible to read. great poem though.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • HereComesTheSun
    October 7, 2008
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    amazing imagery

    as i read i could see the picture i mean you painted it wonderfully with your words great job

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