I have a Bill in my life.
It's not one that I pay monthly.
It's a necessary Bill.
I will owe this Bill forever.
This Bill drains me.
I spend endless sleepless nights
worrying.
Will my plight be the end of me?
Oh, I have other bills.
They are the expected bills.
These bills never surprise me.
It is never an unexplained Bill.
This Bill has a mind of his own.
He is a man.
He is my ex-husband.
I owe Bill a big bill.
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- Poetry Hodgepodge by DolceVito.
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Comments
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i dont know if this was supposed to come across as funny, but it did to me. as i have never been married, ill have to look to my mom's ex for an example of bill. ha ha. i like how you can poke fun at everyday life in your poetry, and make the bad things/experiences seem good
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no.
This just didn't do anything for me.
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It was a cool metaphor --
but it wasn't portrayed strong enough for me, it was too mundane and lacked poetic device and strong phrasing. But, if I think you were to work on those, this piece could work.
Thanks for the entry.
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a little ho-hum, kinda bland, but i kept reading because i wanted to find out what happened. and i kinda predicted how it would end. but i can relate, two people make a mistake and one usually pays for it more.
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this is an interesting piece, slightly boring at times..but nevertheless kept me reading. Good write
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this is pretty good definatly different and refreshing after reading like 3 cutting poems.thanks for sharing
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This is a very unique piece! As I don't have an ex-husband, I can only imagine the size of that "bill"
Great write! Thanks for shairing it!
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well, that was interesting. it definitely wasn't what I expected. nice word play.
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I find the humor in your writing but I also have a different take on it as well...being a male and having an ex-fiance that I share two children with... nicely writ.
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Excellent
I find this to be a bit of a humorous write. Do I catch a wee bit of wry, satirical humor here with perhaps a touch of sarcasm? Being a male, I just had to ask. lol Very well written, indeed. And, no, my name is not Bill. lol -
Oh my goodness
This is a most unusual write and yes sometimes in the turn around we find often a great loss in more ways than one
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Nice one. Definitely got me with that lil twist at the end. WTG! =D
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LMAO. Kill Bill Part 3? Thank you for entering.
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Very clever
Love the humor and the title.
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oh i love this, the way you have written it was great to read!
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I like the way you wrote this,
very different and unique
Well done and thanks for sharing
All the best to you
Ken -
nicely done . . cute contrast . .
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I like how you compare the two bills here. Very clever and humerous.
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I know some "bills" like your bill. Guess sooner or later you're going to have to pay up. LOL I love the humor here. I think we all may have some bills like this, we just call them something else. LOL Great!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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i so love the humor in this poem here you really did a very great awesome job this was a pleasure reading.
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Bills can drag you down, hold you back from living and bury you in debt. Than the Bill in your life, I say Kill Bill and move on. Lol! In your mind, in your mind. that's what I mean. It's a good read.
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Those never ending bills! Just send a notice.....service did not live up to expectations, and due to the present economic climate,no further investment is forthcoming.
Love the poem!
Be well
Slayer
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Oh dear, this Bill will demand payment for as long as you listen. Send it back - Services No Longer Required.
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Hey bill, hi bill, hiya bill! LOL Seems like you can't get away from Bill in every phase of ya life, poor you! Entertaining write
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Wow, what a contrast of the human bill and nagging, lifeless ones....great job!!!
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