weapon
pointed her
realizing truth
it beckoned him
her ardor betrothed
languishing his touch
pining for him intensely
skeptical of her knight lover
not recognized easily in her world
her blade of trust was slender’n sharp
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired- please read contents by StormGoddess.
300 points, ended October 7, 2008, 9 entries
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This reads much better from the bottom, as it seems to lose a little when reading it straight down. Just a little though as it is still understandable the right way. Good work with this.
Thank you for entering and good luck.
Storm -
Master piece
How you wove this together with feelings, delighting the reader, a stroke of genius. Well done. May your success be fulfilled in this contest.
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You're right--really does tell the story better whne read in reverse!! Amazing talent, you are
Joe -
A very creative piece! You have done a great job with the prompt. Good use of metaphores! Her trust, is only for the blade that she keeps ready to guard her from falling prey to deciet. Good poem
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love has a way of cutting both ways. But when forewarned as this piece so well describes, the wise thing would be to run and hide
Joe
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