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Life Prevails

I'm losing sight,
It's almost gone,
Though I'm aware,
It's not the end,
Life prevails.

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  • Guerrero
    November 14, 2008
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    interesting poem..good luck in the contest


  • tomisb
    October 6, 2008
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    As pieces collapse or breakdown, still, we keep going on. Most of us anyway. Your first line is a nice double entandre. Are you losing your vision or is there a deeper sight that has gone away. Perhaps a vision of a once and future world that now has slipped out of truth, into memory and slowly crumbled to the forgotten. I like the simlicity hiding complexity. Well done.
    Peace & Light,
    Tom B.


  • wolfwatcher
    October 5, 2008
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    may life always prevail!!! I like it, short, sweet, and to the point!!! :-)


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    October 4, 2008
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    Expressively drawn... x