Burn the sun down
and yell at ice
Your hallucinogenic nightmares
crawl against your skull
A contest entry
- How brilliant are you? by Lavender Butterfly.
450 points, ended October 5, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is immensely intriguing and profound... x
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Interesting take on the prompt. However, I feel you could change it a little to add more meaning to the poem. For instance, you could remove "and" and "your" in the third line, and replace them with descriptions of the sun or ice.
Good luck in the contest.
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