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Private Property

braided leather lashes bind behind head
cross stitch bitches with bludgeoned crotch needles

stuff animals into their missing eyes

wicked drool dripping down candied wax-lips

 

cock fights rage in back alleys of bedlam

as masqueraded wedding bells ring twelve

in an orgy of swelled fingers and tongues

baby-doll ankle bones bathe in warm silk

 

uninhibited grins wildly spinning

like whirlpool jet streams of soap scum

down drains where voyeurs sit on city streets

and drink champagne and toast to anything

 

I bury my blue balls in a bone yard

beyond bounds of the neighborhood hell hounds

 

 

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  • Cat
    October 24, 2008

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    jesus.

    cross stitch bitches is priceless. some really great alliteration through out the entire piece-

    i can't figure out the stuffed animal image and i am very sure i don't want it explained to me..

    lol.. you are funny- this piece.. oy..

    you did good.

    m


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    October 21, 2008

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    ''braided leather lashes bind behind head
    cross stitch bitches with bludgeoned crotch needles
    stuff animals into their missing eyes
    wicked drool dripping down candied wax-lips''

    I think my BDSM moment has arrived in hell. I actually laughed a little at cross stitch bitches... I really liked this image and line. Very sick opening and you unleased something ugly!

    "cock fights rage in back alleys of bedlam
    as masqueraded wedding bells ring twelve
    in an orgy of swelled fingers and tongues
    baby-doll ankle bones bathe in warm silk"

    baby-doll ankle bones--- nice-- i liked that -- i also like that you started to pick up a story. Instead of justs stating a situation... you have me in a place now. It is one thing to write about disgusting images and such-- but it is harder to tie them together... or is that bind LOL.

    "uninhibited grins wildly spinning
    like whirlpool jet streams of soap scum
    down drains where voyeurs sit on city streets
    and drink champagne and toast to anything"

    i liked the feel of scum with rich folk... good contrast and images.

    "I bury my blue balls in a bone yard
    beyond bounds of the neighborhood hell hounds"

    this line was just funny as hell to me... maybe it was bounds with hounds that i got stuck on but it was like a phsycho green eggs and ham moment.
    but I get the line in its relation to the rest of this...

    very strong entry to the contest. Thank you for taking the time and this was incredibly unique and clever!



  • poetryality silver member
    October 9, 2008

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    I stopped after reading the first line with mouth agape, as seeing is not always believing. LOL

    "wicked drool dripping down candied wax-lips"

    Whoa! Halloween makes that image real loud in my face.

    Incredible imagery everywhere!

    My goodness! SUPERB!



    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • MuddyKing
    October 5, 2008

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    the alliteration in this is crazy, and yet it works so well
    lusty as hell
    almost like a dream you wake up on and want to go back to sleep, and never can
    peace Muddy

    • sheltered
      October 5, 2008
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      Thanks

      lol... as a matter of fact I had one of those dreams last night damn it!


  • Cannonsfire
    October 4, 2008
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    I think some of these doors should stay permanently shut!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    well holy shit you've sure painted some pictures here of some things that go on behind closed doors... and did it brilliantly!!!

    I do cross-stitch I'm starting to think you're picking on me what with that and the "blonde indifference" thing Kidding!

    This is awesome!!!


  • notorious gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    "stuff animals into their missing eyes"
    Holy hell, just love this line...it has creepio-esque imagery and it's just fucking cool!!!

    "wicked drool"
    LMAO, LMAO!
    Whether you mean "cool drool" or "badass drool", well...me gusta anywho.

    "back alleys of bedlam"
    That's all I gotta say.

    This is just amusing...
    Me analyzing the lines doesn't do much else.

    -

    Jessica

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