primary feathers, relics of life
rotated along individual flight
providing a thrust
for the smallest of type,
soaring high.
Author notes
(hands in the air)
billing a seed/on mass
A contest entry
- sparrow by Saffron.
900 points, ended November 7, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me exactly what you think; no holds barred!
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I like this one too. You have a charming way of capturing something bigger than that implied by the few number of words you use. I'd like to put you on my favourites list, I hope that is OK.
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This concise little gem has wings--I adore small poems with punch. I really love how you ended this, and how even the smallest soar high. This is truly very nice.
Thank you so much for entering this contest.
Saffron
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You're soaring high my friend. Wonderful!
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looking up, anyway
thanks!
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oh yeah
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it sort of goes with your avatar!
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I'm just glad I've not got writer's block---nothing was coming to me for weeks, and I was beginning to wonder if my wordy-splurt was over, again
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