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To a Reluctant Worshiper

 

 

 

 

              Hope glimmered in bright eyes,

 but dispare hid,

holding back any preemptive motions

                inviting her to freedom everlasting...

 

 

 

no she was caught in a shiver

oh she was wrapped in a burn

 

 

oh no she is you

no,

oh,

can't be,

not you...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • MelodiousDreaming
    October 5, 2008

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    Your words mesh together so well and always grip me from the very start.
    Congrats on the trophy
    ^_^


  • going nowhere
    October 5, 2008

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    wow... for some reason, this had a deep meaning for me... a spiritual hesitation that makes me yell... NO, it isn't me! well done, and unique take on the prompt. thank you.